Re: [CDNi] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-05

Barry Leiba <barryleiba@computer.org> Mon, 09 September 2019 17:57 UTC

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From: Barry Leiba <barryleiba@computer.org>
Date: Mon, 09 Sep 2019 13:56:50 -0400
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To: Michael Tüxen <tuexen@fh-muenster.de>
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Subject: Re: [CDNi] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-05
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Thanks so much for the review, Michael.  I like your suggestions and
hope the authors will incorporate them into the pending revised I-D,
before I send the document to IESG Evaluation.

Barry

On Mon, Sep 9, 2019 at 1:51 PM Michael Tüxen via Datatracker
<noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
>
> Reviewer: Michael Tüxen
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
> ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
> primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's
> authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the IETF
> discussion list for information.
>
> When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors should consider this
> review as part of the last-call comments they receive. Please always CC
> tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or forward this review.
>
> I have not identified any transport related issues.
>
> To improve readability, you might want to
> * resolve acronyms on first occurence like CDN, CDNI,...
> * Remove section 1.1, since the introduced abbreviations are not used in the text.
> * add a graphical representation of the involved nodes and the messages being exchanged between them
>
> Typos:
> * Section 3: the uCDN provide a fallback -> the uCDN provides a fallback
> * Section 6: Nir B.  Sopher -> Nir B. Sopher (no double space after period)
> * Section 6: Kevin J.  Ma -> Kevin J. Ma (no double space after period)
>