Re: [CDNi] I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07.txt
Kevin Ma <kevin.j.ma.ietf@gmail.com> Fri, 11 October 2019 14:02 UTC
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Subject: Re: [CDNi] I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07.txt
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Hi Ori, A couple of nits that you may want to cleanup in AUTH48 (final author review): - in all places where AAAA was added, add the Oxford comma: "a DNS A record, AAAA record, or CNAME record" - section 3.4: missing comma "Using the MI" -> "Using the MI," thanx! -- Kevin J. Ma On Tue, Sep 24, 2019 at 10:00 AM Ori Finkelman (IETF) < ori.finkelman.ietf@gmail.com> wrote: > Hi All, > This submission fixes the comments from all reviewers, I would like to > thank all reviewers for taking the time and sharing their comments. > Please note the diff should be against revision 05 rather than 06 as most > of the changes were submitted in 06. > > > Here is the full list of comments that were fixed in this version: > ===================================================================== > > **************************************************************** > Reviewer: Barry Leiba (AD) > > 1. Please use the new BCP 14 boilerplate and references: see RFC 8174. > >> fixed > > 2. Abstract vs Introduction: The sentence about the SVA seems out of > place in the Abstract, and is oddly missing from the Introduction. I > would add the first two sentences of the Abstract to the Introduction. > Then remove the first sentence from the Abstract and also remove “In > that aspect,” from the second sentence. > > >> fixed > > 3. RFC 6707 defines necessary terminology, so it probably should be > normative. I will note a downref in the last-call notice in > anticipation of that. > >> fixed > > > *************************************************** > Reviewer: Dan Romascanu (Genart) > > 1. Several non-obvious acronyms are not expanded: FCI, FQDN > >> fixed and removed the ones not used > 2. Section 3 - typo in the first paragraph '...the uCDN MUST be differnet > ...' > >> fixed > > ************************************************* > Reviewer: Zitao Wang (Opsdir) > > #1: There are a lot of abbreviations that are not provided with > explanations or > citations, such as uCDN, dCDN, CFI, etc. > >> fixed and remove the ones not necessary > > #2: The example of of a Redirect Target capability object serialization, > is it > encoded as json? Please present its encoding format. > >> fixed > > #3: In section 2.1, the "Mandatory-to-Specify" attributes of dns-target and > http-target, it describes that "No, but at least one of dns-target or > http-target MUST be present and non-empty." I wonder whether there should > be a > detection mechanism. For example, if the requirements are not met, an error > message will be returned. And if there are existing mechanisms, please > briefly > introduce them. > > >> That one is a great catch, thanks. I have changed it so it is not an > error anymore. Instead we have defined a default behavior for the case > it is not present or empty, see the fixed draft. > > ****************************************************************** > Reviewer: Linda Dunbar (Secdir) > > The terminology RR (Request Router) and CP (Content Provider) specified > by the > Terminology are not used for the entire document. I assume that RR would > be the > one request content, isn't? is RR same as Client? Is RR part of > Downstream CDN > Provider? is the CP same as Downstream CDN provider or Upstream CDN > Provider? > > >> In the new version RR appears in a few locations. I have added more > explanations and references to the relevant CDNI docs where it was defined. > > who issued the Redirect Target? > > It would be good for the document to clearly specify the relationship of > all > the entities, such as who makes request and who respond, and who use the > Redirect Target capability, etc. > > >> we have added drawings of sequences that explain it all, I hope it will > be clearer now. > > ******************************************************************* > Reviewer: Michael Tüxen (Tsvart) > > To improve readability, you might want to > * resolve acronyms on first occurence like CDN, CDNI,... > >> fixed > * Remove section 1.1, since the introduced abbreviations are not used in > the text. > >> fixed > * add a graphical representation of the involved nodes and the messages > being exchanged between them > >> Added sequence diagrams sections for both extensions. > > Typos: > * Section 3: the uCDN provide a fallback -> the uCDN provides a fallback > * Section 6: Nir B. Sopher -> Nir B. Sopher (no double space after period) > * Section 6: Kevin J. Ma -> Kevin J. Ma (no double space after period) > >> fixed > > ******************************************************************* > Reviewer: Ben Niven-Jenkins (CDNI) > > Is there a reason that IPv6 addresses (AAAA records) are excluded from > being allowed as DnsTargets, or is this an oversight? > > >> fixed. references to ipv6 and AAAA record were added in the relevant > places. > > ******************************************************************* > > Thanks, > Ori > > > ---------- Forwarded message --------- > From: <internet-drafts@ietf.org> > Date: Tue, Sep 24, 2019 at 4:49 PM > Subject: [CDNi] I-D Action: > draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07.txt > To: <i-d-announce@ietf.org> > Cc: <cdni@ietf.org> > > > > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts > directories. > This draft is a work item of the Content Delivery Networks Interconnection > WG of the IETF. > > Title : CDNI Request Routing Extensions > Authors : Ori Finkelman > Sanjay Mishra > Filename : draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07.txt > Pages : 17 > Date : 2019-09-24 > > Abstract: > Open Caching is a use case of Content Delivery Networks > Interconnetion (CDNI) in which the commercial Content Delivery > Network (CDN) is the upstream CDN (uCDN) and the ISP caching layer > serves as the downstream CDN (dCDN). The extensions specified in > this document to the CDNI Metadata and FCI interfaces are derived > from requirements raised by Open Caching but are also applicable to > CDNI use cases in general. > > > > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions/ > > There are also htmlized versions available at: > https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07 > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07 > > A diff from the previous version is available at: > > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-07 > > > Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of > submission > until the htmlized version and diff are available at tools.ietf.org. > > Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at: > ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/ > > _______________________________________________ > CDNi mailing list > CDNi@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/cdni >
- [CDNi] I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-request-routin… internet-drafts
- [CDNi] Fwd: I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-request-r… Ori Finkelman (IETF)
- Re: [CDNi] I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-request-ro… Barry Leiba
- Re: [CDNi] I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-request-ro… Kevin Ma
- Re: [CDNi] [E] Re: I-D Action: draft-ietf-cdni-re… sanjay.mishra