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Re: [certid] version -11

Peter Saint-Andre <stpeter@stpeter.im> Mon, 29 November 2010 23:26 UTC

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On 11/26/10 10:46 AM, Paul Hoffman wrote:

> A few editorial-only comments that might or might not elicit a -12:
> 
> - A parenthetical sentence was added to the beginning of 1.5 that is,
> fortunately, not true. The "$" thing in the security terms RFC is
> distracting, and would make this document harder to read. Please just
> remove the parenthetical sentence.

Operator error, already removed.

> - The three examples added to 2.3 are good, but they are in the
> reverse order of the sentence that introduces them.

Too much fiddling right before submission. Corrected in the running text.

> - Paragraph and section breaks are your friend. The "Implementation
> Note" at the end of 2.3 is more properly "Many Implementation Notes"
> and probably deserves its own subsection.

Good point, will place that into a new subsection and split up the long
paragraph into smaller chunks.

> - Spell check is your friend. (Hint: "automatially".)

My wetware has an onboard spell-checker, but missed that one... ;-)

Peter

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