Re: [conex] Comments on draft-ietf-conex-mobile-03

[Nandita Dukkipati <[e-mail]>]

Continuing with some more comments...

Section 2 is ConEx use cases in Mobile Communication Networks, while
Section 3 is ConEx in EPS. Isn't ConEx in EPS also a part of the
mobile communication networks?
I am not getting it: what did you intend to be the key difference
between Sections 2 and 3.

As such my comment for Section 3 is same as below for Section 2:
explain the problem, and then lay out the ConEx based
solution/architecture.

Nandita

On Tue, Jul 22, 2014 at 10:28 AM, Nandita Dukkipati <[e-mail]> wrote:
> (as individual contributor).
>
> Still reading, but wanted to pass on comments on early part of the draft.
>
> Introduction
>
> * The second para describing measurements in cellular networks: is
> there a reference to the data?
>
> Section 2.1 ConEx as a basis for Traffic Management
>
> * The second para goes into great details on QoS requirements in EPS,
> radio bearers etc... but you lost me: what is the point you want to
> make?
>
> * On reading further into Section 2.1, I am just not getting the high
> order point you want to make here. The text switches back and forth
> between explaining the current state in mobile networks (DPI etc.),
> and that ConEx can be useful.
>
> Instead, I suggest the following: separate out the two. First clearly
> explain the traffic management problem in cellular networks. Then go
> on with the specifics on how ConEx can be used to address the problems
> laid out.
>
> I think the above split will save the readers a lot of time in trying
> to parse through Sec. 2.1
>
> Further, the usefulness of ConEx is referred to in very high level
> terms with little details. Going a step further and specifying some
> level of detail as to how ConEx might exactly work in mobile will be
> useful.
>
> Nandita