Re: [conex] WGLC for draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt

Here are some late comments on the draft, sorry they are late/
Best wishes
Phil

Doc is good, seems ready to me. Minor comments

S2.2 "congestion is a property of a link or a path" - seems in tension with the statement at the end of S2.1 "[this doc doesn't define] congestion as a condition or state"?

S2.3 para 1, "measures" -> "is" (twice) - think this would be better as you're defining what rest-of-path & upstream congestion are

Last para of S3, p10. There's a bit of a jump from the penultimate sentence about flat rate pricing to the last sentence about conex. Needs some linking

S4, Enabling more efficient capacity provisioning - this para is hard to follow, it twists around a bit. Also, change title to Enabling more efficient usage of capacity? I think it may be simpler to split into a use case which is user-focussed (about scavenger) and another which is operator-focussed.

S5 para 2 "strong incentive to tell the network .. data" -> "some incentive to deploy conex"

Para 3, Specifies -> proposes (so you don't have to wait for the conex-tcp draft)

Philip Eardley   
Research and Technology Strategy

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From: conex-bounces@ietf.org [mailto:conex-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of marcelo bagnulo braun
Sent: 17 November 2011 01:53
To: 'ConEx IETF list'
Subject: [conex] WGLC for draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt

This note issues the WGLC for draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt.
(http://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt)

Please review the document and send comments before the 5th december.

Thanks, marcelo
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