Re: [conex] WGLC for draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt

On Dec 31 2011, Alissa Cooper wrote:

>Hi Phil,
>
>Thanks. I have entered these into the tracker. Just one question below --
>
> On Dec 19, 2011, at 2:29 AM, <philip.eardley@bt.com> 
> <philip.eardley@bt.com> wrote:
>> S2.3 para 1, "measures" -> "is" (twice) - think this would be better as 
>> you're defining what rest-of-path & upstream congestion are
>> 
>
>I don't understand what you mean by "this."

I think all he is saying is can you change it so it reads more like a 
definition by using "is" rather than "measures". Then it would read

"rest-of-path
   congestion" (also known as "downstream congestion") is the
   level of congestion that a traffic flow is expected to experience
   between the measurement point and its final destination.  "Upstream
   congestion" is the level of congestion experienced up to the
   measurement point."

Toby

>
>Best,
>Alissa
>
>
>> Last para of S3, p10. There's a bit of a jump from the penultimate 
>> sentence about flat rate pricing to the last sentence about conex. Needs 
>> some linking
>> 
>> S4, Enabling more efficient capacity provisioning - this para is hard 
>> to follow, it twists around a bit. Also, change title to Enabling more 
>> efficient usage of capacity? I think it may be simpler to split into a 
>> use case which is user-focussed (about scavenger) and another which is 
>> operator-focussed.
>> 
>> S5 para 2 "strong incentive to tell the network .. data" -> "some 
>> incentive to deploy conex"
>> 
>> Para 3, Specifies -> proposes (so you don't have to wait for the 
>> conex-tcp draft)
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> Philip Eardley   
>> Research and Technology Strategy
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>> -----Original Message----- From: conex-bounces@ietf.org 
>> [mailto:conex-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of marcelo bagnulo braun Sent: 
>> 17 November 2011 01:53 To: 'ConEx IETF list' Subject: [conex] WGLC for 
>> draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt
>> 
>> This note issues the WGLC for draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt.
>> (http://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-conex-concepts-uses-03.txt)
>> 
>> Please review the document and send comments before the 5th december.
>> 
>> Thanks, marcelo
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