Re: [core] [CoRE] Working Group Last Call (WGLC) of draft-ietf-core-target-attr-01

[Marco Tiloca <[e-mail]>]

Hi all,

Thanks for this document, I think it is good and clear. Please see below 
a few minor comments and nits.

Best,
/Marco


[General]

* Consistently with Section 2, shouldn't the document title be "CoRE 
Target Attributes Registry"?

* I think that some occurrences of "Target Attributes" should instead be 
"target attributes". That is:

    - Two occurrences in the Abstract.
    - One occurrence in Section 1, second paragraph.


[Abstract]

* Since Resource Discovery is specifically mentioned, a more precise 
reference is to Section 7.2 of RFC 7252, since its Section 7 comprises 
also Service Discovery.


[Section 1.0]

* s/Section 3 of [RFC5988]/(Section 3 of [RFC5988])

* The last paragraph intended for registrants can be followed by 
something like below, consistently with the text of Section 2.1 instead 
intended for the Designated Expert.

    "Very short target attribute names are intended to be allocated for 
applications that are likely to enjoy wide use and can make good use of 
their shortness. Registrants are encouraged to take it into account when 
defining target attribute names."


[Section 2.0]

* s/a new sub-registry for Target Attributes/a new Target Attributes 
sub-registry for

* s/policy "expert review"/policy "Expert Review"


On 2023-02-14 12:21, Marco Tiloca wrote:
> Dear all,
>
> This email starts a Working Group Last Call for the document:
>
> https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-core-target-attr-01.html
> (CoRE Target Attribute Registry)
>
> The document status can be found at:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-core-target-attr/
>
> Please provide your comments and feedback by Tuesday, 2023-02-28 to 
> [e-mail] or, exceptionally, to [e-mail].
> Having the feedback on the mailing list will allow us to discuss the 
> results at the CoRE interim meeting on 2023-03-01.
>
> Note that it may be the easiest way to submit editorial nits etc. as 
> pull requests at the working group repository 
> https://github.com/core-wg/core-target-attr
>
> Best,
> /Marco
> -- 
> Marco Tiloca
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Marco Tiloca
Ph.D., Senior Researcher

Phone: [phone]

RISE Research Institutes of Sweden AB
Box 1263
164 29 Kista (Sweden)

Division: Digital Systems
Department: Computer Science
Unit: Cybersecurity

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