Re: [Detnet] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-11: (with COMMENT)

["Grossman, Ethan A." <[e-mail]>]

Hi Barry and Balázs,
Also regarding the term "man in the middle" - in the Security draft as a result of similar comments we have decided to replace that terminology with the "on-path" and "off-path" terminology, so perhaps that is what we should do here also? 
Ethan (as Editor, DetNet Security draft)

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Subject: Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-11: (with COMMENT)

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draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-11: No Objection

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Just some small, non-blocking, and easy-to-address comments here:

Abstract:
   This document builds on the DetNet
   Architecture and Data Plane Framework.

Section 2.1:
   This document uses the terminology established in the DetNet
   architecture [RFC8655] and the DetNet Data Plane Framework
   [I-D.ietf-detnet-data-plane-framework].  The reader is assumed to be
   familiar with these documents, any terminology defined therein

Then how is it possible that data-plane-framework is informative?  I think it has to be normative.

— Section 4.2.1 —

   and (2) to allow non-skip zero S/N what simplifies implementation.

I can’t parse that.  Can you fix the wording or explain what I’m missing?

— Section 6 —

   for the mitigation of Man-In-The-Middle attacks

This is entirely up to your judgment, but please consider using phrasing such as “for mitigating attackers-in-the-middle” here.  Thanks.