Re: [Detnet] [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Mon, 15 February 2021 21:17 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [Detnet] [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05
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Vijay, thanks for your review. Balázs, thanks for responding. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa


> On Feb 8, 2021, at 3:44 PM, Balázs Varga A <balazs.a.varga=40ericsson.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> Hi Vijay,
> Many thanks for your review.
> I will fix your nits in the next version. (See inline)
> Thanks
> Bala'zs
> 
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> Subject: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05
> 
> Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani
> Review result: Ready
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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> Document: draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05
> Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
> Review Date: 2021-01-29
> IETF LC End Date: 2021-02-05
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> 
> Summary: Ready to be published as a Proposed Standard. 
> 
> Generally, the I-D is quite heavy on acronyms, some of which I suspect comes with the domain the I-D targets.  While I suspect that most readers versed in the area will not have any problems expanding the acronyms, I just wanted to mention this for the authors to perhaps do a once-over to see if any acronyms need expansion.  (I list a couple in the Nits section.)
> 
> Major issues:  0
> 
> Minor issues:  0
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: 2
> 
> - Figure 2: - What is "Tnl"? (Tunnel?)
>            - What does "AC" mean?
> 
> <Balazs> Thanks. Yes Tnl means Tunnel and AC means Attachment Circuit.
> I will update the figure.
> 
> - IDnits is reporting a couple of unused references ([RFC5921] and
>  [RFC8660]), and that draft-ietf-detnet-mpls has been published as
>  RFC 8964.
> 
> <Balazs> Ack. Thanks.
> 
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