[Detnet] Comments on detnet-yang-15 Re: [Last-Call] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-yang-14

tom petch <daedulus@btconnect.com> Thu, 23 December 2021 11:40 UTC

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Subject: [Detnet] Comments on detnet-yang-15 Re: [Last-Call] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-yang-14
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Borrowing a useful cc: with a related topic

two documents in the YANG module need adding to the I-D References
RFC8938
IEEE 802.1Qcx-2020

contact URL
insecure, obsolete - https://datatracker ...

Editor: Mach Chen
not in the authors of the I-D

TLP out of date

Reference: this ID when published
Reference: "RFC XXXX: Deterministic Networking (DetNet) YANG Model


Tom Petch


On 09/11/2021 20:06, Xufeng Liu via Datatracker wrote:
> Reviewer: Xufeng Liu
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> Thanks to authors for addressing the previous review comments.
>
> The updates look good. The followings are a few additional nits:
>
> 1) In the model, “container flow-spec” has been changed to “container
> traffic-spec”, but the description has not been updated, shown as below:
>
>           container traffic-spec {
>             description
>               "Flow-specification specifies how the Source transmits
>                packets for the flow.  This is the promise/request of the
>                Source to the network.  The network uses this flow
>                specification to allocate resources and adjust queue
>                parameters in network nodes.";
>
> 2) Most names of list and leaf-list have been fixes. The following three were
> missed: “leaf-list member-apps” should be “leaf-list member-app” “leaf-list
> member-services” should be “leaf-list member-service” “leaf-list
> member-fwd-sublayers” should be “leaf-list member-fwd-sublayer”
>
> 3) Section 10.  Security Considerations would need to include a list of
> “sensitive or vulnerable” nodes.  RFC 8349 shows an example.
>
> Thanks,
> - Xufeng