Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-06
Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> Mon, 03 October 2022 20:17 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-06
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Greg, I suggest you instead reference RFC8655, the Deterministic Networking Architecture. It uses consistent capitalization for the "DetNet Controller Plane" term. I think you still have a few more instances of " centralized/central" controller to clarify. Thanks! Lou On 10/3/2022 4:08 PM, Greg Mirsky wrote: > Hi Lou, > apologies for missing the normative verbs and necessary updates to > "DetNet controller plane" terminology. I've added the reference to > draft-ietf-detnet-controller-plane-framework > <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-detnet-controller-plane-framework-02> as > Informational. A minor question about the capitalization of "DetNet > controller plane". It seems like the draft uses > capitalization interchangeably. I've used only lower case in the OAM > draft. Please let me know if that is acceptable. > > Attached, please find the diff and the new working version of the draft. > > Regards, > Greg > > On Fri, Sep 30, 2022 at 5:17 AM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: > > Hi Greg, > > see below. I think the version you sent doesn't address everything > discussed below. > > Also - this is important - please update the draft with a current > email address for Georgios as his current address bounces. If you > don't have one, he must be moved to contributor. > > On 9/28/2022 12:47 PM, Greg Mirsky wrote: >> Hi Lou, >> thank you for your quick response and helpful suggestions to >> improve the document. I've applied them all. As usual, I've >> attached the diff to highlight all the updates and the working >> version of the draft. >> RE: the number of authors on the first page. I agree with the >> response you've proposed. I hope that IESG will thoughtfully >> consider this case. >> >> Regards, >> Greg >> >> On Wed, Sep 28, 2022 at 4:52 AM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: >> >> Hi Greg, >> >> Thanks for the response/update -- please see below. >> >> On 9/27/2022 5:52 PM, Greg Mirsky wrote: >>> Hi Lou, >>> thank you for the review, comments, and helpful suggestions. >>> Please find my notes and responses inlined below under the >>> GIM>> tag. Attached is the working version of the draft and >>> the diff highlighting all updates. >>> >>> Regards, >>> Greg >>> >>> On Fri, Sep 23, 2022 at 11:13 AM Lou Berger >>> <lberger@labn.net> wrote: >>> >>> Hi, >>> >>> In preparing my shepherd write up, I noticed a few >>> minor/editorial >>> points that should be addressed before submission for >>> publication to the >>> IESG. >>> >>> - Number of authors: >>> The IESG requires justification for more than 5 authors >>> listed on the >>> font page. This document has 6. Is anyone willing to >>> move to >>> contributor? If not, can you provide a justification for >>> more than 5 >>> authors >>> >>> GIM>> I believe that all authors, in the course of >>> developing this document, provided essential contributions. >> >> The question that needs to be answered in the Shepherd write >> up is as follows: >> >> >> 13. ... If the total number of authors and editors on the >> front page >> is greater than five, please provide a justification. >> >> Do you want me to just say? >> >> The authors believe all listed have provided essential >> contributions in the course of developing this document. >> >> Keep in mind the IESG pushes back hard on more than 5 >> authors. If the authors have a stronger justification, can >> you (authors) provide it. >> > I will try, but I expect that we will receive strong push back on > this. > > >>> >>> - Inclusion of conformance boilerplate (Section 1.3) and >>> conformance >>> language. >>> >>> Generally informational documents do not include the >>> conformance >>> boilerplate or related language. For example, there is >>> none in the >>> DetNet framework, RFC8939. On the other hand RFC 4377, >>> OAM Requirements >>> for MPLS Networks, does. >>> >>> Is there really a need for such in this document? If you >>> do, the scope >>> of the requirement needs to be clear. (E.g, the >>> requirements are on >>> future solutions "DetNet OAM solutions MUST..." or >>> "solutions providing >>> DetNet OAM MUST..."). Or perhaps just a statement to >>> this effect at the >>> end of section 1.3 or start of section 6. >>> >>> GIM>> I propose appending Section 1.3 with the following: >>> The requirements language in Section 6 >>> applies to future implementations of DetNet OAM. >> >> How about >> >> The requirements language is used in Section 6 and applies to >> future implementations of DetNet OAM. >> > I still see requirements terms in sections other than 6 in the > version you sent out, e.g., > > 3. Operation > > OAM features will enable DetNet with robust operation both for > forwarding and routing purposes. > > It is worth noting that the test and data packets MUST follow the > same path, i.e., the connectivity verification has to be conducted > in-band without impacting the data traffic. Test packets MUST > share > fate with the monitored data traffic without introducing congestion > in normal network conditions. > >>> >>> Section 3-5 I really don't see the need for conformance >>> language in this >>> section. >>> >>> GIM>> Upon reviewing the last paragraph, propose to remove >>> it altogether: >>> OLD TEXT: >>> DetNet OAM mechanisms SHOULD allow a fault detection in >>> real time. >>> They MAY, when possible, predict faults based on current >>> network >>> conditions. They MAY also identify and report the cause >>> of the >>> actual/predicted network failure. >>> >>> >>> - Section 3.4, s/NOT RECOMMENDED/expected >>> >>> GIM>> We've discussed this and propose the following update: >>> OLD TEXT: >>> DetNet is not expected to use multiple paths or links, >>> i.e., Equal- >>> Cost Multipath (ECMP) [RFC8939]. As the result, OAM in ECMP >>> environment is outside the scope of this document. >>> NEW TEXT >>> DetNet is not expected to use Equal-Cost Multipath (ECMP) >>> [RFC8939]. >>> As the result, DetNet OAM in ECMP environment is outside >>> the scope of this >>> document. >>> >>> >>> - Section 5.2 >>> Can you rephrase/clarify the following sentence. I >>> frankly have no idea >>> what is meant by it: >>> >>> We need to provide mechanisms to patch the network >>> configuration. >>> >>> GIM>> Thank you for pointing out this sentence to us. It is >>> not really related to OAM but seems more in place in a >>> discussion of the management plane. Hence, propose removing >>> the sentence. >>> >>> >>> That's it! >>> >> The above all looks good -- thanks! >> >>> GIM>> In the course of addressing your comments, we've come >>> up with several more editorial updates. Please let us know >>> if these are helpful: >>> In Section 4: >>> OLD TEXT >>> * per path to detect misbehaving path when multiple >>> paths are >>> applied. >>> NEW TEXT >>> * per path to detect misbehaving path(s) when multiple >>> paths are >>> used for service protection. >>> >>> In Section 5, prepend the following new text to the first >>> paragraph: >>> NEW TEXT: >>> Service protection (provided by the DetNet service >>> sub-layer) is designed >>> to cope with simple network failures, and it mitigates >>> the immediate reaction >>> of the DetNet controller to network events. >>> >> What about the case where a controller is not used? Do you >> perhaps mean "DetNet Controller Plane"? >> > Note this is a general comment: The document mentions controller > in many places. To be consistent with the DetNet Architecture the > document should allow for any 'Controller Plane' solution. This > should be easily fixed, starting in section 2. > > Thank you, > > Lou > >> Lou >> >>> >>> >>> Thank you, >>> Lou >>>
- [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framew… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky