[dhcwg] review of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis-05 chapters 21-26

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Thu, 04 August 2016 13:45 UTC

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Subject: [dhcwg] review of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis-05 chapters 21-26
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Here is the review of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis-05 chapter 21 (was
chapter 23 in RFC 3315) Security Considerations to chapter 26 References
pages 115-124

- 22 Privacy page 117: I suggest said -> that in
 "It particular, Section 3 of said document discuss various"



PS: note if the section 25 (acknowledgments) becomes too large perhaps
it should be split into 2 parts, one inherited from RFC 3315 (with
RFC 3633 merged as it is now), one with the new stuff.