[dhcwg] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-dhc-slap-quadrant-09: (with COMMENT)
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Subject: [dhcwg] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-dhc-slap-quadrant-09: (with COMMENT)
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Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-dhc-slap-quadrant-09: No Objection When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dhc-slap-quadrant/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- As with Robert, I'm interested to hear what coordination with IEEE has occurred, both for this and for the companion "mac-assign" document. I'm also, as Warren, puzzled as to why the Shepherd Writeup claims there's no IPR claim when the datatracker disagrees, and struck by how much text here overlaps with the "mac-assign" document. As for editorial remarks, I have some: Section 1: * I am unable to parse the bullet that defines the "Administratively Assigned Identifier" quadrant. Section 1.1.1: * "Examples of this include: sensors ..." -- remove the colon * "... temporary MAC address, to send initial ..." -- remove the comma * "... good for assigning addresses from, but ..." -- remove "from" * "... easy to track users' movement." -- s/movement/movements/ * "... best SLAP quadrant to assign addresses from, ..." -- suggest "best SLAP quadrant from which to assign addresses, ..." Section 2: * "... typically 6 bytes long ..." -- s/6/six/ Section 3: * "If we now take the ..." -- suggest "Next, consider the ..." * Generally I found this section to have a mushy sort of structure. It begins and ends by mapping certain use cases onto certain quadrants explicitly, but in the middle seems to wander into a checklist of things you might think about without mapping those concepts toward a preferred quadrants. You might consider firming this up with, perhaps four separate paragraphs, or even subsections, each describing ideal uses for one of the quadrants, taking into account the facets of that choice you've enumerated here. Section 6 * I suggest omitting the IANA URL. What if it were to change? All you really need is the registry name.
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