[dhcwg] TSV-ART review of draft-ietf-dhc-relay-port-06

Joerg Ott <ott@in.tum.de> Wed, 01 November 2017 16:52 UTC

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Subject: [dhcwg] TSV-ART review of draft-ietf-dhc-relay-port-06
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Hi,

I’ve reviewed this document as part of the transport area review team's 
ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written 
primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the 
document's authors for their information and to allow them to address 
any issues raised. When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors 
should consider this review together with any other last-call comments 
they receive. Please always CC tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or 
forward this review.

Jörg


Summary:
This draft is essentially ready.  I do not see any transport-specific
issues.

Comments:
It seems that in a few places, the document does not use RFC 2119
keywords where they could/should be used.  For example, in the
introduction paragraph to section 4 and in section 5.2 (right after the
enumeration).  Not sure if the non-use was intentional or an oversight.

Nit:
p.3: This is a standards track document, so the language could be
stronger.

OLD:
This document proposes an extension to relax the fixed UDP source

NEW:
This document defines an extension to relax the fixed UDP source