Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt
Benoit Claise <bclaise@cisco.com> Tue, 17 July 2012 00:11 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt
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Hi Glen, > On Tue, 2012-07-10 at 16:46 +0200, Benoit Claise wrote: >> Dear all, Glen, >> >> Please find below the AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt >> >> The document is in a good enough shape to be sent to IETF LC. >> Please consider my comments together with the other IETF LC comments. >> >> Glen, let me know if you plan on submitting a quick revision soon, or >> if I should send THIS version to the IETF LC (which might lead to >> redundant comment) >> >> >> - Some idnits >> http://tools.ietf.org/idnits?url=http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt >> >> Miscellaneous warnings: >> ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- >> >> == The document seems to use 'NOT RECOMMENDED' as an RFC 2119 keyword, but >> does not include the phrase in its RFC 2119 key words list. >> >> Checking references for intended status: Proposed Standard >> ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- >> >> == Missing Reference: 'BASE' is mentioned on line 219, but not defined >> >> I understand that this is a quote from RFC4005. To avoid the source >> of confusion, here is a proposal > > Rereading this, I don't know what confusion you mean. It seems to be > fine English, pretty clear, and it doesn't seem like the change you > suggest is likely to unconfuse ID-nits. What am I missing? This proposal will not unconfuse ID-nits, but would make clear to the reader that this is a quote, and nobody would look for the [BASE] reference ... as this is quote from a different document. Anyway, minor point. Change it in a next version if you believe that's an improvement. > >> >> OLD: >> However, the presence of an >> instance of the Acct-Application-Id AVP was required in RFC 4005, >> as well: >> >> The ACR message [BASE] is sent by the NAS to report its session >> information to a target server downstream. >> >> Either of Acct-Application-Id or Vendor-Specific-Application-Id >> AVPs MUST be present. If the Vendor-Specific-Application-Id >> grouped AVP is present, it must have an Acct-Application-Id >> inside. >> NEW: >> However, the presence of an >> instance of the Acct-Application-Id AVP was required in RFC 4005, >> which quotes: >> >> "The ACR message [BASE] is sent by the NAS to report its session >> information to a target server downstream. >> >> Either of Acct-Application-Id or Vendor-Specific-Application-Id >> AVPs MUST be present. If the Vendor-Specific-Application-Id >> grouped AVP is present, it must have an Acct-Application-Id >> inside." >> >> - I could not find the meaning of * in, for example, >> >> [ CHAP-Auth ] >> [ CHAP-Challenge ] >> * [ Framed-Compression ] >> [ Framed-Interface-Id ] >> [ Framed-IP-Address ] >> * [ Framed-IPv6-Prefix ] >> [ Framed-IP-Netmask ] >> [ Framed-MTU ] >> [ Framed-Protocol ] >> [ ARAP-Password ] >> [ ARAP-Security ] >> * [ ARAP-Security-Data ] >> * [ Login-IP-Host ] >> * [ Login-IPv6-Host ] >> [ Login-LAT-Group ] >> [ Login-LAT-Node ] >> [ Login-LAT-Port ] >> [ Login-LAT-Service ] >> * [ Tunneling ] >> * [ Proxy-Info ] >> * [ Route-Record ] >> * [ AVP ] >> I believe that you have forgotten to include your proposed text: Note that the message formats in the following sub-sections use the standard Diameter Command Code Format ([I-D.ietf-dime-rfc3588bis], Section 3.2). Regards, Benoit.
- [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… dieter.jacobsohn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise