Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt
Glen Zorn <glenzorn@gmail.com> Sun, 15 July 2012 04:50 UTC
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From: Glen Zorn <glenzorn@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt
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On Tue, 2012-07-10 at 16:46 +0200, Benoit Claise wrote: > Dear all, Glen, > > Please find below the AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt > > The document is in a good enough shape to be sent to IETF LC. > Please consider my comments together with the other IETF LC comments. > > Glen, let me know if you plan on submitting a quick revision soon, or > if I should send THIS version to the IETF LC (which might lead to > redundant comment) > > > - Some idnits > http://tools.ietf.org/idnits?url=http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09.txt > > Miscellaneous warnings: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- > > == The document seems to use 'NOT RECOMMENDED' as an RFC 2119 keyword, but > does not include the phrase in its RFC 2119 key words list. > > > > Checking references for intended status: Proposed Standard > ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- > > == Missing Reference: 'BASE' is mentioned on line 219, but not defined > > > I understand that this is a quote from RFC4005. To avoid the source of > confusion, here is a proposal Rereading this, I don't know what confusion you mean. It seems to be fine English, pretty clear, and it doesn't seem like the change you suggest is likely to unconfuse ID-nits. What am I missing? > > OLD: > > However, the presence of an > instance of the Acct-Application-Id AVP was required in RFC 4005, > as well: > > The ACR message [BASE] is sent by the NAS to report its session > information to a target server downstream. > > Either of Acct-Application-Id or Vendor-Specific-Application-Id > AVPs MUST be present. If the Vendor-Specific-Application-Id > grouped AVP is present, it must have an Acct-Application-Id > inside. > > NEW: > > However, the presence of an > instance of the Acct-Application-Id AVP was required in RFC 4005, > which quotes: > > "The ACR message [BASE] is sent by the NAS to report its session > information to a target server downstream. > > Either of Acct-Application-Id or Vendor-Specific-Application-Id > AVPs MUST be present. If the Vendor-Specific-Application-Id > grouped AVP is present, it must have an Acct-Application-Id > inside." > > > - One small improvement > OLD: > > o The accounting model to be used is now specified. > > NEW > o The accounting model to be used is now specified. See section 1.6 > > - Expand on the first ASA occurrence > > - Add an point after [I-D.ietf-dime-rfc3588bis] > > 3.1. AA-Request (AAR) Command > > The AA-Request (AAR), which is indicated by setting the Command-Code > field to 265 and the 'R' bit in the Command Flags field, is used to > request authentication and/or authorization for a given NAS user. > The type of request is identified through the Auth-Request-Type AVP > [I-D.ietf-dime-rfc3588bis] The recommended value for most situations > is AUTHORIZE_AUTHENTICATE. > > - I could not find the meaning of * in, for example, > > [ CHAP-Auth ] > [ CHAP-Challenge ] > * [ Framed-Compression ] > [ Framed-Interface-Id ] > [ Framed-IP-Address ] > * [ Framed-IPv6-Prefix ] > [ Framed-IP-Netmask ] > [ Framed-MTU ] > [ Framed-Protocol ] > [ ARAP-Password ] > [ ARAP-Security ] > * [ ARAP-Security-Data ] > * [ Login-IP-Host ] > * [ Login-IPv6-Host ] > [ Login-LAT-Group ] > [ Login-LAT-Node ] > [ Login-LAT-Port ] > [ Login-LAT-Service ] > * [ Tunneling ] > * [ Proxy-Info ] > * [ Route-Record ] > * [ AVP ] > - 3.7. Abort-Session-Request (ASR) Command > > The Abort-Session-Request (ASR) message [I-D.ietf-dime-rfc3588bis] > may be sent by any server to the NAS providing session service, to > request that the session identified by the Session-Id be stopped. > > > By "any Diameter server"? like in section 3.3 btw. > > - IANA Considerations > Do we need to change all the "4005" entries in > http://www.iana.org/assignments/aaa-parameters/aaa-parameters.xml into > "4005bis"? > Or to be more correct, the new RFC id for 4005bis? > > - OLD > > [RADIUSTypes] IANA, "IANA Radius Attribute Values > Registry", <http://www.iana.org/ > assignments/radius-types-3>. > > NEW: > [RADIUSTypes] IANA, "IANA Radius Attribute Values > Registry", <http://www.iana.org/ > assignments/radius-types>. > > > ALTERNATE PROPOSAL > > [RADIUSTypes] IANA, "IANA Radius Attribute Values > Registry", <http://www.iana.org/assignments/radius-types/radius-types.xml#radius-types-1>. > > > Regards, Benoit.
- [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bis-09… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… dieter.jacobsohn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… lionel.morand
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Glen Zorn
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Dime] AD review of draft-ietf-dime-rfc4005bi… Benoit Claise