Re: [DMM] [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-16

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Thu, 21 February 2019 14:03 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [DMM] [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-16
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Russ, thanks for your review. I pointed to it in my DISCUSS ballot.

Alissa

> On Feb 17, 2019, at 4:55 PM, Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> wrote:
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> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review result: Ready
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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> Document: draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-16
> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review Date: 2019-02-17
> IETF LC End Date: 2019-02-15
> IESG Telechat date: 2019-02-21
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
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> Major Concerns:
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> None.
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> Minor Concerns:
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> None.
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> Nits:
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> In the Abstract: s/section 4 of [RFC7333]/RFC 7333/
> (because references are not permitted in the Abstract).
> 
> In Section 3.1, last paragraph: drop the '(' and ')'.
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