[dns-privacy] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-dprive-xfr-over-tls-11: (with COMMENT)

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COMMENT:
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With my BCP 14 language complainer hat on:

Section 7:

* "Implementations SHOULD use [RFC7828] [...] to manage persistent
connections." -- since this is a SHOULD, can you suggest why an implementer
might opt not to do this?  Section 7.3.1 does a great job of handling the
SHOULD it presents, for example.

Sections 7.3.2 and 7.3.3:

* Same issue as above with the SHOULDs here.

Section 7.4:

* "Therefore, it is RECOMMENDED that [...] there SHOULD be no more than [...]."
-- I don't know how to reconcile this RECOMMENDED-SHOULD combination in the
same sentence.  I suggest that the first clause can be dropped with no loss of
meaning.

Everything else is nits, some of which were probably also mentioned by others:

Section 1:

* "authoritatives" should probably be "authoritative nameservers"

* "authenticated denial of existences records" -- s/existences/existence/

Section 4:

* "The proposed mechanisms does not attempt" -- s/does/do/, or
s/mechanisms/mechanism/

Section 6:

* "term is used to encompasses" -- s/encompasses/encompass/, or remove "is used
to"

Sections 6.1 and 6.2

* "higher than the secondaries serial" -- s/secondaries/secondary's/

Section 6.2:

* "So there may be a fourth step above where [...].  There may also be a fourth
step where [...]." -- so there can be two "fourth" steps?

Section 6.3:

* "This section attempts to presents" -- remove "attempts to", or
s/presents/present/

* In the second paragraph, I think you need a comma after "servers".