[DNSOP] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dnsop-attrleaf-13

Erik Kline <ek@google.com> Wed, 26 September 2018 19:57 UTC

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Reviewer: Erik Kline
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-dnsop-attrleaf-13
Reviewer: Erik Kline
Review Date: 2018-09-26
IETF LC End Date: 2018-09-25
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Major issues: none

Minor issues: none

Nits/editorial comments: just a few things that look like they may be typos

Section 2:  "DNS nodes names" doesn't quite scan for me.  "DNS node names" perhaps?

Section 4.2: s/simply/simplify/?

Section 5: s/in the of/in the/?