Re: [DNSOP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-dnsop-kskroll-sentinel-13.txt

[Bob Harold <[e-mail]>]

On Tue, Jun 5, 2018 at 6:09 AM <[e-mail]> wrote:

>
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the Domain Name System Operations WG of the
> IETF.
>
>         Title           : A Root Key Trust Anchor Sentinel for DNSSEC
>         Authors         : Geoff Huston
>                           Joao Silva Damas
>                           Warren Kumari
>         Filename        : draft-ietf-dnsop-kskroll-sentinel-13.txt
>         Pages           : 20
>         Date            : 2018-06-05
>
> Abstract:
>    The DNS Security Extensions (DNSSEC) were developed to provide origin
>    authentication and integrity protection for DNS data by using digital
>    signatures.  These digital signatures can be verified by building a
>    chain of trust starting from a trust anchor and proceeding down to a
>    particular node in the DNS.  This document specifies a mechanism that
>    will allow an end user and third parties to determine the trusted key
>    state for the root key of the resolvers that handle that user's DNS
>    queries.  Note that this method is only applicable for determining
>    which keys are in the trust store for the root key.
>
>    [ This document is being collaborated on in Github at:
>    https://github.com/APNIC-Labs/draft-kskroll-sentinel.  The most
>    recent version of the document, open issues, etc should all be
>    available here.  The authors (gratefully) accept pull requests.  RFC
>    Editor, please remove text in square brackets before publication. ]
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dnsop-kskroll-sentinel/
>
> There are also htmlized versions available at:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-dnsop-kskroll-sentinel-13
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-dnsop-kskroll-sentinel-13
>
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-dnsop-kskroll-sentinel-13
>
>
Looks good.
A few nits:

 4.1. Test Scenario and Objective

"loose" -> "lose"


4.3. Test Procedure
"The sentinel detection process test a DNS resolution environment with
three query names:"

Perhaps "tests" is better grammer?
"The sentinel detection process *tests* a DNS resolution environment with
three query names:"

-- 
Bob Harold