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On Fri, Aug 17, 2018 at 3:24 AM <internet-drafts@ietf.org> wrote:
>
>
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
> This draft is a work item of the DNS Over HTTPS WG of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : DNS Queries over HTTPS (DoH)
>         Authors         : Paul Hoffman
>                           Patrick McManus
>         Filename        : draft-ietf-doh-dns-over-https-14.txt
>         Pages           : 20
>         Date            : 2018-08-16
>
> Abstract:
>    This document defines a protocol for sending DNS queries and getting
>    DNS responses over HTTPS.  Each DNS query-response pair is mapped
>    into an HTTP exchange.
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-doh-dns-over-https/
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Hi,


I would like to refine the document by pointing out several spelling issues.


On Page 6, Paragraph 2, Section 4.2:

[...] The amount and type of information that a media type gives is solely up to the format, and not defined in this protocol.

s/is/are/



On Page 8, Paragraph 3, Section 5.1:

[...] This requirement helps prevent exipred RRsets in messages in an HTTP cache from unintentionally being served.

s/exipred/expired/



On Page 4, Paragraph 5, Section 4.1:

[...] When using the POST method the DNS query is included as the message body [...]

(Minor issue) I suggest a comma (,) followed by "method". But okay if keep untouched.



Best regards,
Star Brilliant

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