[Dots] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: (with COMMENT)
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Subject: [Dots] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: (with COMMENT)
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Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: No Objection When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot-positions/ for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- # GEN AD review of draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14 CC @larseggert Thanks to Peter E. Yee for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review (https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/jpVrKg9QCjWlcKWgprDRW0Q09lY). ## Nits All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you did with these suggestions. ### Grammar/style #### Section 1, paragraph 1 ``` highly automated. To that aim, multi-vendor components involved in DDoS atta ^^^^^^^^^^^^ ``` This word is normally spelled as one. (Also elsewhere.) #### Section 3.1.5, paragraph 2 ``` S mitigation service by reporting on-going and detailed DDoS countermeasure ^^^^^^^^ ``` Did you mean "ongoing"? (Also elsewhere.) #### Section 3.2, paragraph 6 ``` irroring to copy the traffic destined a IP address and to monitor the traffic ^ ``` Use "an" instead of "a" if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. "an article", "an hour". ## Notes This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the [`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT]. [ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md [ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments [IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool
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