Re: [Dots] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-21.txt

Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk@mit.edu> Thu, 28 May 2020 20:55 UTC

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From: Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk@mit.edu>
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Subject: Re: [Dots] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-21.txt
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On Fri, May 15, 2020 at 08:05:29PM +0000, Daniel Migault wrote:
> Please find the version 21 that considers all feed backs - or at least my understanding of them - that we received until now.

Thanks for the updates; I'll go ahead and kick off the IETF LC.

It does look like one of my editorial comments was not understood as I
intended, but we can treat that as we would a LC comment:


Section 1

   As DDoS solutions are broadly heterogeneous among vendors, the
   primary goal of DOTS is to provide high-level interaction amongst
   differing DDoS solutions, such as detecting, initiating, terminating
   DDoS mitigation assistance or requesting the status of a DDoS
   mitigation.

nit: the list structure is not properly parallel.  It looks like the
various clauses are meant to be "detecting DDoS",
"initiating/terminating mitigation assistance", and "requesting
mitigation status", so maybe this could become:

% As DDoS solutions are broadly heterogeneous among vendors, the
% primary goal of DOTS is to provide high-level interaction amongst
% differing DDoS solutions, such as detecting DDoS attacks,
% initiating/terminating DDoS mitigation assistance, or requesting the
% status of a DDoS mitigation.

The -21 adds the '/' in "initiating/terminating DDoS mitigation assistance"
but there were a few other changes in my proposal that are needed to make
the list structure parallel.  E.g., the full phrase "detecting DDoS
attacks" and the serial comma.

Thanks,

Ben