Re: [Dots] I-D Action: draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-02.txt

Hi Yuhei, all,

Thank you for the update. 

I have one comment: please remove all "total-pipe-capacity" items from the examples as these ones do not appear during the attack signaling, but during the telemetry setup. You may also reword the following accordingly: 

   The aim of this use case is to enable transit providers to select an
   optimal path for redirecting attack traffic to a DMS according to the
   bandwidth of the attack traffic, total traffic, and total pipe
   capability.

And some very minor nits and suggestions: 

* Please use draft-ietf-dots-rfc8782-bis instead of RFC8782
* s/Figure 2 gives an example of message body of DOTS telemetry/Figure 2 provides an example of a DOTS telemetry message body that is used to signal top-talkers. 
* s/Figure 2: Example of Message Body/Figure 2: Example of Message Body to Signal Top-Talkers
* s/Figure 4 gives an example of message body of DOTS telemetry/Figure 4 provides an example of a DOTS telemetry message body that is used to signal various attack traffic percentiles.
* s/Figure 4: Example of Message Body/Figure 4: Example of Message Body with Total Attack Traffic
* (you can follow the same approach for fixing the other captions)
* s/network managements system/network management system
* s/volume from transit provider/volume from the transit provider
* s/when DDoS attacks occurs/when DDoS attacks occur

Other than that, the document is more and more stable and even ready for the WGLC.  

Cheers,
Med

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> Objet : Re: [Dots] I-D Action: draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-
> 02.txt
> 
> Hi all,
> 
> I made draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-02 based on your
> comments.
> I'm sorry for being late to update it.
> 
> Major change point is as below.
> - extract use cases already included in the telemetry I-D
> - include message bodies with the attributes.
> 
> Git is here.
> https://github.com/yuheihayashi/dotstelemetryusecase
> 
> Comments or questions are welcome.
> 
> Thanks,
> Yuhei
> 
> 2021年7月2日(金) 13:06 <internet-drafts@ietf.org>:
> >
> >
> > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> > This draft is a work item of the DDoS Open Threat Signaling WG of
> the IETF.
> >
> >         Title           : Use Cases for DDoS Open Threat Signaling
> (DOTS) Telemetry
> >         Authors         : Yuhei Hayashi
> >                           Meiling Chen
> >                           Li Su
> >         Filename        : draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-
> 02.txt
> >         Pages           : 27
> >         Date            : 2021-07-01
> >
> > Abstract:
> >    Denial-of-service Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) Telemetry
> enriches the
> >    base DOTS protocols to assist the mitigator in using efficient
> DDoS-
> >    attack-mitigation techniques in a network.  This document
> presents
> >    sample use cases for DOTS Telemetry: what components are
> deployed in
> >    the network, how they cooperate, and what information is
> exchanged to
> >    effectively use these techniques.
> >
> >
> > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-
> cases/
> >
> > There is also an htmlized version available at:
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-
> use-cases-02
> >
> > A diff from the previous version is available at:
> > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-
> cases-02
> >
> >
> > Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at:
> > ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/
> >
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