Re: [Dots] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-21.txt

mohamed.boucadair@orange.com Fri, 29 May 2020 12:42 UTC

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Hi Daniel, all,

Apologies for the late comment, but can you please make the following change in the next iteration of the draft: 

OLD: 
   This document provides sample use cases that provided input for the
   design of the DOTS protocols.

NEW:
   This document provides sample use cases that provided input for the
   design of the DOTS protocols [RFC8772][RFC8773].

Thank you. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Dots [mailto:dots-bounces@ietf.org] De la part de Benjamin Kaduk
> Envoyé : jeudi 28 mai 2020 22:55
> À : Daniel Migault
> Cc : dots@ietf.org
> Objet : Re: [Dots] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-dots-
> use-cases-21.txt
> 
> On Fri, May 15, 2020 at 08:05:29PM +0000, Daniel Migault wrote:
> > Please find the version 21 that considers all feed backs - or at
> least my understanding of them - that we received until now.
> 
> Thanks for the updates; I'll go ahead and kick off the IETF LC.
> 
> It does look like one of my editorial comments was not understood as I
> intended, but we can treat that as we would a LC comment:
> 
> 
> Section 1
> 
>    As DDoS solutions are broadly heterogeneous among vendors, the
>    primary goal of DOTS is to provide high-level interaction amongst
>    differing DDoS solutions, such as detecting, initiating,
> terminating
>    DDoS mitigation assistance or requesting the status of a DDoS
>    mitigation.
> 
> nit: the list structure is not properly parallel.  It looks like the
> various clauses are meant to be "detecting DDoS",
> "initiating/terminating mitigation assistance", and "requesting
> mitigation status", so maybe this could become:
> 
> % As DDoS solutions are broadly heterogeneous among vendors, the
> % primary goal of DOTS is to provide high-level interaction amongst
> % differing DDoS solutions, such as detecting DDoS attacks,
> % initiating/terminating DDoS mitigation assistance, or requesting the
> % status of a DDoS mitigation.
> 
> The -21 adds the '/' in "initiating/terminating DDoS mitigation
> assistance"
> but there were a few other changes in my proposal that are needed to
> make
> the list structure parallel.  E.g., the full phrase "detecting DDoS
> attacks" and the serial comma.
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> Ben
> 
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