[Dots] Robert Wilton's No Objection on draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: (with COMMENT)

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draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Hi,

Thanks for this document.  A couple of minor nits:

(1) p 2, sec 1.  Introduction

  This document presents sample use
   cases for DOTS Telemetry, which makes concrete overview and purpose
   described in [RFC9244]: what components are deployed in the network,
   how they cooperate, and what information is exchanged to effectively
   use attack-mitigation techniques.

I found this sentence hard to parse.


(2) p 5, sec 3.1.1.  Mitigating Attack Flow of Top-talker Preferentially

   The forwarding nodes send traffic statistics to the flow collectors,
   e.g., using IP Flow Information Export (IPFIX) [RFC7011].  When DDoS
   attacks occur, the flow collectors identify the attack traffic and
   send information about the top-talkers to the orchestrator using the
   "target-prefix" and "top-talkers" DOTS telemetry attributes.  The
   orchestrator then checks the available capacity of the DMSes by using
   a network management protocol, such as Simple Network Management
   Protocol (SNMP) [RFC3413] or YANG with Network Configuration Protocol
   (YANG/NETCONF) [RFC6020].

Please use RFC 7950 as the reference for YANG.  Please check other references.

Regards,
Rob