Re: [Dots] AD review of draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-17

Daniel Migault <daniel.migault@ericsson.com> Fri, 12 July 2019 12:12 UTC

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From: Daniel Migault <daniel.migault@ericsson.com>
Date: Fri, 12 Jul 2019 08:12:05 -0400
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Subject: Re: [Dots] AD review of draft-ietf-dots-use-cases-17
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Thanks for the follow up Ben. So I think your concern has been addressed by
other changes in the document.
Though I am not saying I do not introduced other nits of the same kind, I
checked throughout the document
and I believe any time web interface is mentioned it is currenlty clear it
does not belong to the network admin.

Maybe some english native co-authors could do a last proof-reading of the
document to remove these sort of nits.
the cuurent version is at:


The current text is:

"""
The analysis from the
orchestrator is reported to the network administrator via a web
interface. If the network administrator decides to start the
mitigation, the network administrator triggers the DDoS mitigation
request using the web interface of a DOTS client communicating to the
orchestrator DOTS server. This request is expected to be associated with
a context that provides sufficient information to the orchestrator DOTS
server to infer the DDoS Mitigation to elaborate and coordinate.
"""

Yours,
Daniel


On Thu, Jul 11, 2019 at 8:40 PM Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk@mit.edu>; wrote:

> On Thu, Jul 04, 2019 at 04:13:38PM -0400, Daniel Migault wrote:
> >
> > c) it was unclear to me how to address the following comment.
> >
> >
> > >    The communication between a network administrator and the
> > >    orchestrator is also performed using DOTS.  The network
> administrator
> > >    via its web interfaces implements a DOTS client, while the
> > >    Orchestrator implements a DOTS server.
> > >
> > > nit: as written, this is saying that the network administrator has a
> > > web interface.  I think "its" is supposed to refer to something else.
> > >
> > > <mglt>
> > What we are trying to say is that the network administrator sees its web
> > interface, and instruct the DOTS client from that interface. I have not
> > made any change to address that concern, as I do not clearly see what is
> > confusing.
> > </mglt>
>
> I don't think anyone is actually confused about the meaning; this was just
> a pedantic comment about the grammar.  "its web interface"  has to belong
> to something/someone, and with the current wording we are forced to parse
> the sentence as "the network administrator's web interface", which is
> surprising since a network administrator is a human and a web interface is
> usually provided by a webserver.  Perhaps we want to say "The network
> administrator uses a web interface that implements a DOTS client"?
>
> -Ben
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