Re: [Dots] WGLC for draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-04

[H Y <[e-mail]>]

Hi Med,

Thank you so much!

Please see inline.

2022年2月18日(金) 17:45 <[e-mail]>:

>
> Hi Yuhei, all,
>
> Thank you very much for taking care of the comments in a timely manner.
>
> I think that we are almost there, but I'm afraid that one further revision may be needed.
>
> For convenience, I added the proposed changes directly to the xml file that can find at:
> * xml: https://github.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts-Reviews/blob/master/draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-08-rev%20Med.xml
> * txt: https://github.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts-Reviews/blob/master/draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-08-rev%20Med.txt
>
> A diff to track the proposed changes can be seen at: https://raw.githubusercontent.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts-Reviews/master/wdiff%20draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-08.txt%20draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-08-revMed.txt.pdf
>
> The main proposed changes are as follows:
>
> * Updated the security section as the draft includes aspects that were not covered in the telemetry draft (controllers, orchestrators, etc.)
> * Added the folding as per RFC8792
[Yuhei] Thank you! We will check the update.

>
> Also,
> (1) Can you please clarify in the text what is meant by "teacher labels".
[Yuhei] For consistency with the Terminology section, we will update as below.

 After mitigating a DDoS attack, the flow collector attaches outputs
 of the DMS as labels to the statistics of traffic flow of top-
 talkers.  The outputs, for example, are the "attack-id" telemetry
 attributes.  The flow collector, then, carries out supervised machine
 learning to increase its detection accuracy, setting the statistics
 as an explanatory variable and setting the labels as an objective
 variable.


> (2) Most of the use cases include a statement where DOTS client/server are implemented. However, some of the use cases do not include such statement. I would add a similar text for these use cases for consistency. Also, please check that all instances that implement DOTS elements are cited in the examples.
[Yuhei] Thank you. We will check the update.

[Yuhei]  We will update the draft and submit it in a few days.

Thanks,
Yuhei

>
> Some text (e.g., about IPFIX and BGP flow spec) is repeated several times in the draft. I'm OK with that but expect that some reviewers will ask to factorize that text.
>
> Thank you.
>
> Cheers,
> Med
>
> > -----Message d'origine-----
> > De : H Y <[e-mail]>
> > Envoyé : vendredi 18 février 2022 04:51
> > À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <[e-mail]>; dots
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> > Cc : dots-chairs <[e-mail]>; Valery Smyslov
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> > Meiling Chen <[e-mail]>
> > Objet : Re: RE: [Dots] WGLC for draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-04
> >
> > Hi Med, All
> >
> > I submitted the latest version 08. I think all Med's comments were
> > addressed.
> >
> > Comments are welcome.
> >
> > Thanks,
> > Yuhei
>
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