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Re: [Dots] WGLC on draft-ietf-dots-architecture-08

<mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> Tue, 04 December 2018 12:21 UTC

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Re-,

FWIW, a version which integrates my initial comments including the conclusion of the discussion in this thread is available at: 

Xml: https://github.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts-Reviews/blob/master/draft-ietf-dots-architecture-09.xml     
Diff: https://github.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts-Reviews/blob/master/wdiff%20draft-ietf-dots-architecture-09.txt%20draft-ietf-dots-architecture-09.pdf

This version fixes also some "stale" text such as references to "Operational Requirements" that are not anymore listed as such in draft-ietf-dots-requirements. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Dots [mailto:dots-bounces@ietf.org] De la part de
> mohamed.boucadair@orange.com
> Envoyé : jeudi 29 novembre 2018 09:31
> À : Roman Danyliw; dots@ietf.org
> Objet : Re: [Dots] WGLC on draft-ietf-dots-architecture-08
> 
> Hi Roman, all,
> 
> I support this draft to be sent to the IESG for publication.
> 
> Some easy-to-fix comment, though:
> 
> (1) The document cites [I-D.ietf-dots-requirements] in may occurrences. I
> suggest these citations to be more specific, that is to point the specific
> REQ# or the section. Doing so would help readers not familiar with DOTS
> documents to easily link the various pieces.
> 
> (2) I used to point people to the DOTS architecture I-D when I receive
> comments/questions about the notion of "DOTS session" and to the Requirements
> I-D for clarification about DOTS channels. It seems that some clarifications
> are needed in the architecture I-D to explain for readers not familiar with
> all DOTS documents, for example:
> - the link with the underlying transport sessions/connections and security
> associations.
> - mitigations are not bound to a DOTS session but to a DOTS client/domain.
> 
> (3) The signal channel I-D uses "DOTS signal channel session", "DOTS signal
> channel sessions" and "DOTS data channel session" to refer to specific DOTS
> sessions. I'd like to have these terms introduced also in the arch I-D.
> 
> BTW, the signal channel uses in few occurrences "DOTS session"; those can be
> changed to "DOTS signal channel session". There is no occurrence of "DOTS
> session" in the data channel I-D.
> 
> Thank you.
> 
> Cheers,
> Med
> 
> > -----Message d'origine-----
> > De : Dots [mailto:dots-bounces@ietf.org] De la part de Roman Danyliw
> > Envoyé : mardi 27 novembre 2018 23:15
> > À : dots@ietf.org
> > Objet : [Dots] WGLC on draft-ietf-dots-architecture-08
> >
> > Hello!
> >
> > Consistent with our discussion at the Bangkok meeting, we are starting a
> > working group last call (WGLC) for the DOTS architecture draft:
> >
> > DOTS Architecture
> > draft-ietf-dots-architecture-08
> > https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-dots-architecture-08
> >
> > Please send comments to the DOTS mailing list -- feedback on remaining
> issues
> > or needed changes; as well as endorsements that this draft is ready.
> >
> > This WGLC will end on December 12, 2018.
> >
> > Thanks,
> > Roman and Frank
> >
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