Re: [Ecrit] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-12.txt

Randall Gellens <rg+ietf@randy.pensive.org> Tue, 26 October 2021 22:02 UTC

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I support Dan's suggested edits.  Regarding the suggestion to reorganize 
the text, Dan, do you have specific suggestions (e.g., move paragraphs 
x-y of Section 3 to follow Paragraph z of Section 4)?

--Randall

On 12 Oct 2021, at 9:21, Dan Banks wrote:

> I am satisfied with the changes made in this version.  There are a 
> handful of new editorial issues:
>
> Invalid Location and Valid Location definitions have a difference in 
> wording that I think is unintentional:
> Invalid Location:  A Civic Location that, when included
> versus
> Valid Location:  A Civic Location, when included
> I prefer the inclusion of 'that'.
> Both of these definitions are also missing a period at the end.
>
> In section 3,
> there is no such thing as "15th Ave North
> should be
> there is no such thing as "15th Avenue North"
> (expand Ave and add missing double quote)
>
> In the first paragraph of section 4, there appears to be an escaping 
> issue:
> <civicAddressgt;
>
> I still believe the document could be improved with a bit of 
> reorganization of sections 3 and 4, but I support advancing the 
> document without additional changes if that is the consensus.
>
> Dan Banks
>
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>> Subject: [Ecrit] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-12.txt
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>> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts 
>> directories.
>> This draft is a work item of the Emergency Context Resolution with 
>> Internet
>> Technologies WG of the IETF.
>>
>>         Title           : A LoST extension to return complete and 
>> similar location info
>>         Authors         : Brian Rosen
>>                           Roger Marshall
>>                           Jeff Martin
>> 	Filename        : draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-12.txt
>> 	Pages           : 17
>> 	Date            : 2021-10-11
>>
>> Abstract:
>>    This document introduces a new way to provide returned location
>>    information in LoST responses that is either of a completed or
>>    similar form to the original input civic location, based on 
>> whether
>>    valid or invalid civic address elements are returned within the
>>    <findServiceResponse> message.  This document defines a new 
>> extension
>>    to the <findServiceResponse> message within the LoST protocol
>>    [RFC5222] that enables the LoST protocol to return in a response a
>>    completed civic address element set for a valid location response,
>>    and one or more suggested sets of similar location information for 
>> an
>>    invalid location.  These two types of civic addresses are referred 
>> to
>>    as either "complete location" or "similar location", and are 
>> included
>>    as a compilation of CAtype xml elements within the existing LoST
>>    <findServiceResponse> message structure.
>>
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