Re: [Ecrit] [Last-Call] Iotdir telechat review of draft-ietf-ecrit-data-only-ea-21

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From: "Eric Vyncke (evyncke)" <evyncke@cisco.com>
To: "Gonzalo Salgueiro (gsalguei)" <gsalguei@cisco.com>, "iot-directorate@ietf.org" <iot-directorate@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Ecrit] [Last-Call] Iotdir telechat review of draft-ietf-ecrit-data-only-ea-21
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Thank you very much Gonzalo,

I will use your review when entering my IESG ballot later today. Having a directorate review really helps the AD job ;-)

Regards

-éric

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Date: Monday, 2 March 2020 at 20:49
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Subject: [Last-Call] Iotdir telechat review of draft-ietf-ecrit-data-only-ea-21

    Reviewer: Gonzalo Salgueiro
    Review result: Ready with Nits
    
    Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-data-only-ea-21
    Review result: Ready with Nits
    Review type: iotdir - Last Call review
    Requested version for review: Current
    Review Date: 2020-03-02
    Reviewer: Gonzalo Salgueiro
    
    I am the assigned IoT directorate reviewer for <draft-ietf-ecrit-data-only-ea>.
    These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Internet Area
    Directors. Document editors and shepherd(s) should treat these comments just
    like they would treat comments from any other IETF contributors and resolve
    them along with any other Last Call comments that have been received. For more
    details on the IoT Directorate, see
    https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/iotdir/about/
    
    This document describes (1) how method of including a CAP message in a SIP
    transaction by defining it as a block of "additional data" as well as (2)
    describes how a SIP MESSAGE transaction can be used to send a non-interactive
    call. I have reviewed this document from the IoT perspective and the document
    appears to be informative, clear and without obvious technical gaps. There are
    just a few the authors might consider addressing.
    
    Nits:
    ====
    
    S: Abstract
    
    "type of interactions" -> "types of interactions"
    
    S:1
    
    "alert specific" -> "alert-specific"
    
    S:9
    
    "Location specific" -> "Location-specific"
    
    S:9
    
    "Note that none of the security mechanism in this document" -> "Note that none
    of the security mechanisms in this document"
    
    
    
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