Re: [eppext] Working Group Last Call for draft-ietf-eppext-keyrelay

"Hollenbeck, Scott" <shollenbeck@verisign.com> Thu, 23 July 2015 14:26 UTC

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From: "Hollenbeck, Scott" <shollenbeck@verisign.com>
To: James Galvin <galvin@elistx.com>, eppext <eppext@ietf.org>
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: EppExt [mailto:eppext-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of James Galvin
> Sent: Thursday, July 23, 2015 10:05 AM
> To: eppext
> Subject: [eppext] Working Group Last Call for draft-ietf-eppext-
> keyrelay
> 
> This is the start of the WGLC for "Key Relay Mapping for the Extensible
> Provisioning Protocol".
> 
> My co-chair Antoin is one of the authors of this document, he has
> recused himself from managing the progression of this document through
> the IETF process.
> 
> There has been extensive discussion on the mailing list, I believe all
> issues and concerns have been resolved, and the document is ready for
> WGLC.
> 
> The current version of this document can be found here:
> 
>      https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-eppext-keyrelay-04/

I have reviewed this document. Mostly minor comments except for the last one:

1. the URL above 404s for me. This one worked:

https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-eppext-keyrelay/

2. I'd recommend removing the reference from the abstract. Abstracts should be able to stand alone outside the document without references.

OLD:
[RFC5730]

NEW:
RFC 5730

3. Section 1.2: "focuses" is misspelled as "focusses".

4. Section 5: A template should be included to register the XML schema described in Section 4. Suggestion: Replace the existing Section 5.2 with this template, and bump 5.2 to 5.3.

Registration request for the key relay XML schema:

  URI: urn:ietf:params:xml:schema:keyrelay-1.0

  XML: See Section 4 ("Formal Syntax") of this document.

It appears that this IANA registry (http://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry/xml-registry.xhtml#schema) does not require a registrant contact.

Scott