Return-Path: X-Original-To: forces@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: forces@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id C81DD12D176; Wed, 25 May 2016 07:44:54 -0700 (PDT) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: 1.739 X-Spam-Level: * X-Spam-Status: No, score=1.739 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DOS_OUTLOOK_TO_MX=2.845, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, RDNS_NONE=0.793] autolearn=no autolearn_force=no Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id iaFYzKJGNP7h; Wed, 25 May 2016 07:44:52 -0700 (PDT) Received: from hickoryhill-consulting.com (unknown [50.245.122.97]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 4129C12D768; Wed, 25 May 2016 07:44:51 -0700 (PDT) X-Default-Received-SPF: pass (skip=loggedin (res=PASS)) x-ip-name=174.124.182.128; From: "Susan Hares" To: Date: Wed, 25 May 2016 10:44:45 -0400 Message-ID: <01b401d1b693$fb411810$f1c34830$@ndzh.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="----=_NextPart_000_01B5_01D1B672.74308980" X-Mailer: Microsoft Outlook 14.0 Thread-Index: AdG2keUYwqsP4AJKSjCZY/xFiMIDqg== Content-Language: en-us X-Authenticated-User: skh@ndzh.com Archived-At: Cc: rtg-dir@ietf.org, zhang.xian@huawei.com, forces@ietf.org, Jonathan.Hardwick@metaswitch.com, draft-ietf-forces-interfelfb@tools.ietf.org, 'Jon Hudson' Subject: [forces] RTG-DIR review of ForCES Inter-FE LFB (draft-ietf-forces-interfelfb-04.txt) X-BeenThere: forces@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.17 Precedence: list List-Id: ForCES WG mailing list List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Wed, 25 May 2016 14:44:55 -0000 This is a multipart message in MIME format. ------=_NextPart_000_01B5_01D1B672.74308980 Content-Type: text/plain; charset="utf-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Hello:=20 I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. = The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related = drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and = sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is to provide = assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing = Directorate, please see = = =E2=80=8Bhttp://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it = would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other IETF = Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through = discussion or by updating the draft. Document: draft-ietf-forces-interfelfb-04.txt Reviewer: Susan Hares Date: 5/25/2016 IETF End Date: unknown=20 Intended Status: Standards track =20 Summary: This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits = that should be considered before publication.=20 =20 Comments:=20 =C2=B7 Document contains good technical content for extending = the Forces work into an Inter-FE LFB. The document is easily read, but = a few nits would improve its readability. =C2=B7 My hand check of the inter-FE LFB XML model indicated all = XML is fine. If an automated check of the XML with the Forces LFBs, it = would be useful to run this check. =20 =C2=B7 The improvement in the congestion consideration section = (5.1.3) between -03 and -04 was necessary. =20 =20 Major issues: none=20 =20 Nits:=20 Page 9 figure 5. =E2=80=93 the between figure lines is not aligned.=20 This line begins with the =E2=80=9CEthernet Frame with:=E2=80=9D=20 =20 Page 12 =E2=80=93=20 Old /(XXX: note to editor/ New /(XXX: note to RFC editor/ =20 Page 15=20 Old /original payload i.e. skips the IFE header information./ New /original payload (i.e. skips the IFE header information)/ =20 Page 21=20 =20 Old /This memo includes one IANA requests within the registry = https://www.iana.org/assignments/forces/ =20 New /This memo includes one IANA request within the registry = https://www.iana.org/assignments/forces. / =20 p. 22=20 Old /As such, it has no impact on their security considerations./ New/ As such, it has no impact on these documents security = considerations./ =20 Sue Hares=20 =20 =20 ------=_NextPart_000_01B5_01D1B672.74308980 Content-Type: text/html; charset="utf-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable

Hello: =

I have been selected as the = Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Routing Directorate = seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as they pass = through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special = request. The purpose of the review is to provide assistance to the = Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing Directorate, please = see =E2=80=8Bhttp://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/= rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir

Although these comments are = primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it would be helpful if you = could consider them along with any other IETF Last Call comments that = you receive, and strive to resolve them through discussion or by = updating the draft.

Document: = draft-ietf-forces-interfelfb-04.txt

Reviewer: Susan Hares

Date: 5/25/2016

IETF End Date: unknown

Intended Status: Standards track

 

Summary: = This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits that = should be considered before publication.

 

Comments: =

=C2=B7         = Document contains good technical content = for extending the Forces work into an Inter-FE LFB. =C2=A0=C2=A0The = document is easily read, but a few nits would improve its = readability.

=C2=B7         = My hand check of the inter-FE LFB XML = model indicated all XML is fine.=C2=A0 If an automated check of the XML = with the Forces LFBs, it would be useful to run this check.=C2=A0 =

=C2=B7         = The improvement in the congestion = consideration section (5.1.3) between -03 and -04 was necessary.=C2=A0 =

 

Major issues: none

 

Nits: =

Page 9=C2=A0 figure 5. =E2=80=93 the = between figure lines is not aligned.

This line begins with the =E2=80=9CEthernet Frame = with:=E2=80=9D

 

Page 12 = =E2=80=93

Old

/(XXX: note to editor/

New /(XXX: note to RFC editor/

 

Page 15 =

Old /original payload i.e. skips the = IFE header information./

New = /original payload (i.e. skips the IFE header = information)/

 

Page 21

 

Old

/This memo = includes one IANA requests within the registry https://www.iana.org/as= signments/forces/

 

New

/This memo = includes one IANA request within the registry = https://www.iana.org/assignments/forces. /

 

p. 22 =

Old /As such, it has no impact on = their security considerations./

New/ = As such, it has no impact on these documents security = considerations./

 

Sue Hares =

 

 

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