Re: [gaia] [irsg] Review required: draft-irtf-gaia-alternative-network-deployments

[Javier Simó <[e-mail]>]

For the most important points (the most detailed ones), there are a few 
good interdisciplinary people in this lists with a background in 
development studies. I guess that it is just a matter of these people 
polishing the text.

For point 4, ... well, the decission after Prague was to TAKE OUT the 
experiences and build another document. If experiences are required in 
here, then, we should reverse that decission and pilot a controlled 
introduction of best practices / case studies in the appropriate 
subsections.

Best
Javier

El 01/02/16 a las 13:58, Jose Saldana escribió:
> Thank you very much, Niels!
>
> We will take your comments into account in order to build an improved version of the draft.
>
> Best regards,
>
> Jose
>
>> -----Mensaje original-----
>> De: gaia [mailto:[e-mail]] En nombre de Mat Ford
>> Enviado el: lunes, 01 de febrero de 2016 13:27
>> Para: Niels ten Oever <[e-mail]>; draft-irtf-gaia-alternative-network-
>> [e-mail]
>> CC: gaia <[e-mail]>; Internet Research Steering Group <[e-mail]>
>> Asunto: Re: [gaia] [irsg] Review required: draft-irtf-gaia-alternative-network-
>> deployments
>>
>> Thanks very much for the detailed review Niels, it is valuable.
>>
>> Authors - please discuss how you would like to address these comments and let
>> Niels and myself know. If there is a need for further discussion, please let’s keep
>> that on [e-mail].
>>
>> Mat
>>
>>> On 30 Jan 2016, at 23:35, Niels ten Oever <[e-mail]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Dear all,
>>>
>>> Please find my review of
>>> https://www.ietf.org/id/draft-irtf-gaia-alternative-network-deployment
>>> s-03.txt below. This is my first IRSG review, so please bear with me.
>>>
>>> I mostly followed https://wiki.tools.ietf.org/html/rfc5743#section-2.2
>>> and academic review practices, but please let me know where I might
>>> have misstepped.
>>>
>>> I hope this is useful.
>>>
>>> 0.
>>> The topic of the draft is very relevant and timely and brings together
>>> many different angles that are needed to address the multidisciplinary
>>> nature of access, the Internet, and community owned networks.
>>>
>>> 1.
>>> The issue of the digital divide is approached from a 'development
>>> studies' paradigm (e.g. developing countries), quite some scientific
>>> literature has been published about this topic. Most current
>>> literature acknowledges that for instance term 'developing country' is
>>> problematic because it assumes that all countries are on a similar
>>> trajectory, from 'underdeveloped' to 'western'. Empirical data shows
>>> that this is not the case. More accurate would be to address
>>> differential developmental trajectories by referring to the Global
>>> North vs. the Global South, or using other frames.
>>>
>>> Also terms like 'Digital Divide', 'Data Revolution', 'Information
>>> Society' as well as the 'WSIS process' have been dissected, discussed
>>> and interpreted in quite a variety of ways. it might be good to engage
>>> with the literature on this if you would like to use these terms, and
>>> if so, refer to the relevant sources.
>>>
>>> Same is true for the method or model of knowledge transfer that is
>>> mentioned in the draft. At several places it is implied that knowledge
>>> travels from North to South and from Urban to Rural, which might be a
>>> one dimensional way of representing a quite multifaceted process of
>>> technology appropriation and development.
>>>
>>> In terms of methodology: you are clearly coming at this problem from a
>>> multidisciplinary approach. Which is great, considering the
>>> multidisciplinary nature of the Internet and the problem you are
>>> addressing. However, if you do decide to use concepts from different
>>> fields and disciplines (like for instance urban and rural from urban
>>> planning, demand and provision from economics or the digital divide
>>> from
>>> sociology) it is important to make this explicit. I would suggest
>>> adding a sub-section in which you explain how you built your
>>> multidisciplinary research method and why you use the concepts you applied.
>>>
>>> 2.
>>> There is a lot of doubling between abstract and introduction. I
>>> recommend reducing the abstract.
>>>
>>> 3.
>>> The discussion under point 1. and 2. is maybe not necessary for
>>> achieving the goal of providing a a taxonomy of alternative network
>>> deployments. However, Maybe the first part could be shorter.
>>>
>>> 4.
>>> It could perhaps be interesting to provide some additional information
>>> on actual alternative network deployments, perhaps by providing some
>>> case studies and, on the basis of these, a set of best practices /
>>> recommendations for specific situations.
>>>
>>> In the attached file more inline editorial comments and suggestions
>>> are provided.
>>>
>>> Best,
>>>
>>> Niels
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> --
>>> Niels ten Oever
>>> Head of Digital
>>>
>>> Article 19
>>> www.article19.org
>>>
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>>>
>>>
>>> Niels ten Oever
>>> Head of Digital
>>>
>>> Article 19
>>> www.article19.org
>>>
>>> PGP fingerprint    8D9F C567 BEE4 A431 56C4
>>>                    678B 08B5 A0F2 636D 68E9
>>>
>>> On 01/14/2016 12:39 PM, Mat Ford wrote:
>>>> Hi folks,
>>>>
>>>> The GAIA RG has successfully concluded an RG Last Call for the
>>>> document
>>>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-irtf-gaia-alternative-network
>>>>> -deployments/
>>>> As document shepherd I’m now looking for someone from the IRSG to review
>> the document. Any volunteers?
>>>> If no one volunteers, Lisandro Granville is top of the list:
>>>> https://trac.tools.ietf.org/group/irtf/trac/wiki/IRSGReviewLog
>>>>
>>>> Mat
>>>>
>>> <draft-irtf-gaia-alternative-network-deployments-03 edit NtO.txt>
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