[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-redundancy-bit-07.txt

["Miguel A. Garcia" <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-redundancy-bit-07.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[e-mail]>
Review Date: 23-May-2012
IESG Telechat date: 24-May-2012

Summary: The document is almost ready for publication as a standards 
track RFC, but has some minor issues that should be fixed.

I reviewed version -06 of this document. At that time I had a few 
comments. Most of them have been successfully addressed. In this review I 
am addressing the leftovers and new issues.

Major issues: none

Minor issues:

- In my previous review, I highlighted that many lowercase 2119-reserved 
words (like "must", "may", etc.) should actually be written in uppercase 
to be really normative. Rather than analyzing each case on a one by one 
basis, the authors have systematically written in uppercase all 
2119-reserved words. The problem is that now some uppercase 2119-reserved 
words don't make sense, and should be reverted to lowercase. Allow me 
some examples:

   * Sections 1 (Introduction) and 2 (Motivation and Scope). Since these 
are descriptive sections in nature, normative text should not be written 
here. If there is a need to write normative text, it should be written 
later in any of the procedures sections.

   * Section 5.2, 1st paragraph, the "MUST" does not really have a 
normative intention as it is currently written:

    One endpoint node of the redundant set of PWs is designated the
    Master and is responsible for selecting which PW both endpoints MUST
    use to forward user traffic.

   * Section 15.2. I understand that this section describes scenarios or 
examples of architectures. Therefore, it does not make sense to write 
normative statements in here. If you need one, it should be written in 
any of the procedures sections. There is a "SHOULD" on the 4th paragraph 
of Section 15.2. The same applies to the last paragraph in Section 15.4 
and last paragraph in Section 15.6.




Nits/editorial comments:

- The abstract has added a new sentence at the end. Unfortunately there 
is a new reference "in RFC 5542 [9]". Abstracts shouldn't include 
references. Just write "... in RFC 5542".

- There is an extra dot at the end of the second paragraph in Section 
6.1. The same happen in the last paragraph of Section 15.3. And yet the 
same in the third paragraph of Section 15.4, and the second paragraph in 
15.6.

- Section 15.4, second paragraph, the term "Figure" is repeated.

- Section 15.5, the last paragraph starts with some strange indentation.

/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
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Ericsson Spain