Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11

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Tom,
Thank-you for the nice feedback! Very pleased that all the revs have made it good.

Will resolve your nits in the next rev

Best wishes
phil

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Tom Taylor [mailto:[e-mail]]
> Sent: 09 March 2015 13:15
> To: Gen Art; Eardley,PL,Philip,TUB8 R; Al Morton; [e-mail];
> Burbridge,T,Trevor,TUB8 R; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; Dan
> Romascanu; Benoit Claise; The IESG
> Subject: IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> 
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
> 
> Document:  draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11
> Reviewer:  Tom Taylor
> Review Date: 2015/03/05
> IETF LC End Date: 2015/03/09
> IESG Telechat date: 2015/03/12
> 
> Summary: Beautifully written and very complete. A few editorial nits
> that could be safely ignored without affecting the utility of the
> document.
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> Section 3, "Logging Information": s/and which/which/
> 
> Section 5, bullet 1.: not sure a protocol is trying to achieve a
> problem. Achieve a solution to a problem (solve or resolve it) or
> achieve an objective, perhaps.
> 
> Section 7, second paragraph: should delete the reference to the
> charter, since that is ephemeral information. I would rephrase as
> follows:
>   s/similar to the protocol/just as is the protocol/
>