Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-6man-lineid-05

Suresh Krishnan <suresh.krishnan@ericsson.com> Sat, 30 June 2012 01:05 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-6man-lineid-05
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Hi Kathleen,
  Thanks for the review.

kathleen.moriarty@emc.com wrote:
> Nits/editorial comments:
>  
> Figure 1: Some of the acronyms used in the diagram are not expanded upon
> in the introduction section, RG for instance (it is in the terminology
> section, but is the only acronym not spelled out near figure 1).  It may
> also be confusing to see AN for Access Node next to Aggregation
> Network.  It may help to expand AN?  It is in the Introduction, so not a
> big deal.

Will clarify this in the next revision. Thanks for catching this.

Thanks
Suresh