Re: [Gen-art] [bess] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Thu, 21 January 2021 02:10 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [bess] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09
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Russ, thanks for your review. Jorge, thanks for responding. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa


> On Jan 4, 2021, at 10:52 AM, Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View) <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com> wrote:
> 
> Hi Russ,
>  
> Thank you for the review!
> Please see my comments in-line with [jorge].
>  
> Thanks again!
> Jorge 
>  
> From: BESS <bess-bounces@ietf.org <mailto:bess-bounces@ietf.org>> on behalf of Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org <mailto:noreply@ietf.org>>
> Date: Friday, December 4, 2020 at 10:00 PM
> To: gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org> <gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org>>
> Cc: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd.all@ietf.org <mailto:draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd.all@ietf.org> <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd.all@ietf.org <mailto:draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd.all@ietf.org>>, bess@ietf.org <mailto:bess@ietf.org> <bess@ietf.org <mailto:bess@ietf.org>>, last-call@ietf.org <mailto:last-call@ietf.org> <last-call@ietf.org <mailto:last-call@ietf.org>>
> Subject: [bess] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09
> 
> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review result: Almost Ready
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
> like any other last call comments.
> 
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> 
> Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09
> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review Date: 2020-12-04
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-12-15
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> 
> Summary: Almost Ready
> 
> 
> Major Concerns:
> 
> There is a normative downward reference to Informational RFC 6820.
> It looks to me like this should be an informative reference.
> [jorge] agreed. Changed.
> 
> 
> 
> Minor Concerns:
> 
> The Abstract seems very long.  I suggest:
> 
>    This document describes the EVPN Proxy-ARP/ND function, augmented
>    by the capability of the ARP/ND Extended Community.  Together,
>    these help operators of Internet Exchange Points (IXPs), Data
>    Centers (DCs), and other networks deal with IPv4 and IPv6 address
>    resolution issues associated with large Broadcast Domains (DBs) by
>    reducing and even suppressing the flooding produced by address
>    resolution in the EVPN network.
> [jorge] ok, changed based on your suggestion.
> 
>  
> Nits:
> 
> When there is a line break in the middle of "->", it is quite difficult
> to read.  I hope there is a way to make the hyphen non-breaking.
> 
> s2.2: s/devices and therefore floods/devices, and therefore, floods/
> 
> s2.2: s/messages, however ARP/messages; however, ARP/
> 
> s6.5: s/IXP's peering network space/IXP peering network space/
> 
> s7: s/flooded, however the/flooded; however, the/
> 
> s7: s/will definitely protect/protects/
> [jorge] done all the above, thanks.
> 
> 
> 
> IDnits reports:
> 
>   == The 'Updates: ' line in the draft header should list only the _numbers_
>      of the RFCs which will be updated by this document (if approved); it
>      should not include the word 'RFC' in the list.
> [jorge] done, thanks.
> 
> 
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