Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis
Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Fri, 06 April 2018 23:29 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis
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Hi, Suresh and draft authors. Sorry for my inaction on checking the updates. I have now run through the changes (phew!) and think you are almost good to go. There are a couple of minor typos and a query about RFC 8213. Otherwise, thanks for addressing most of my issues/suggestions - I am gennerally happy with the outcome. Last few thoughts: s18.1: s/facility/facilitate/ s19.4, next to last para: s/insert an option to/insert an option into/ s20.3, para 2: > This method MUST be supported by all protocols.This seems to be rather presumptious! s20.3, para 3: s/a message with RDM field/a message with the RDM field/ s21.22, 9th para after Table 36: s/The client SHOULD NOT send an IA Prefix option with 0/The client SHOULD NOT send an IAPrefix option with 0/ [space removed] s20.1/s27.2: Keeping RFC 8213 as a separate item is fair enough, but I still feel it should be normative Cheers,Elwyn Sent from Samsung tablet. -------- Original message --------From: Suresh Krishnan <Suresh@kaloom.com> Date: 06/04/2018 04:15 (GMT+00:00) To: Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Subject: Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis Hi Elwyn, As I spoke to you during IETF week, the authors of draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis have addressed your review comments with text changes as well as explanations in case there are no text changes. Can you take a quick look at the latest rev to see if there are any open issues? I would like to get this draft approved by the end of this week. The latest draft is here https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-dhc-rfc3315bis-12 The issues and the changes are tracked here https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1Yu6-BSV6aWPnhPGxKMPkokSaevjpfzTXe5_98ceoUMU/edit#gid=0 Thanks Suresh
- Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-d… Elwyn Davies
- Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-d… Bernie Volz (volz)
- Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-d… Suresh Krishnan
- Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-d… Bernie Volz (volz)
- Re: [Gen-art] Your Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-d… Elwyn Davies