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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

Qin Wu <bill.wu@huawei.com> Sat, 27 June 2020 07:02 UTC

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From: Qin Wu <bill.wu@huawei.com>
To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>, "draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology.all@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology.all@ietf.org>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Thanks Meral for valuable review and will incorporate your comments in v-14.

-Qin
发件人: Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com]
发送时间: 2020年6月27日 14:13
收件人: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology.all@ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
主题: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2020-*06-26
IETF LC End Date: 2020-*06-25
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.


Major issues:


Minor issues:
Is it possible to add in the abstract and or intro where the info of the topology information is to be used?
Maybe borrowing some text from RFC8345.


Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 21], Section 6, "NMDA-complient"---->"NMDA-compliant"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
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