[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-rfc5549revision-04
Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Thu, 09 July 2020 22:16 UTC
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Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review result: Almost Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-rfc5549revision-04 Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 2020-07-09 IETF LC End Date: 2020-07-21 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: The document is well written, and almost ready for publication. I only have a couple of editorial nits. Major issues: N/A Minor issues: N/A Nits/editorial comments: Q1. In the Abstract, I suggest the split the text into 2 paragrahps, where the "This document specifies..." sentence is the beginning of the second paragraph. Q2. In the Introduction section, in the last paragraph, instead of saying "This document specifies the extensions necessary to do so." I suggest to be explicit about what the document specifies - similar to the Abstract. Q3. The document uses "IPvX Network Layer Protocol" and "IPvX Protocol" terminology. Similarly, the document uses "IPvX" and "IPvX Address" terminology. Unless there is a good reason, I suggest do double check whether the terminology can be more consistent. Q4. In the IANA Considerations section, I suggest to use the IANA registry table format, where the different values (Value, Description and Reference) are indicated, e.g., as in Section 7 of RFC 8654. Also similar to 8654, please indicate the IANA registry name.
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