[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-bier-isis-extensions-06

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Tue, 13 February 2018 04:01 UTC

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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

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Document: draft-ietf-bier-isis-extensions-06
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2018-02-12
IETF LC End Date: 2018-02-22 ?
IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-22

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-please updated references to latest draft version/RFC number
-Section 2 would be clearer is the definitions introduced only in this document are identified as such
-Please spell out  multi topology, sub-domain at  first use for MT SD
-[Page 6], "advertisments."--->"advertisements"
-[Page 8], "occurences"--->"occurrences"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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