[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-payload-tsvcis-01.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Thu, 26 September 2019 20:15 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-payload-tsvcis-01.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20190918
IETF LC End Date: 20190925
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - 1.1 page 3: add RFC 8174 with RFC 2119

 - 3 page 4 figure 1 and many other: if you have some control on page
  formatting please try to put short figure on one page, and to not leave
  for instance a section title alone at the end of a page. Note that
  anyway the RFC Editor should fix that...

 - 3.1 page 5: possible TCVCIS -> TSVCIS?

 - 5 page 16: spurious space / bad indent at
  " No SDP negotiations are required."

 - 6 page 16: errored -> ?

 - 9 page 17: the RFC Editor Considerations just says that the RFC Editor
  may remove it? Looks like a place-holder...

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr