Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic-05

Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> Sun, 30 October 2011 08:50 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic-05
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Thank you for your review!

On 28.10.2011 16:55, Vijay K. Gurbani wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic-05
> Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
> Review Date: Oct-28-2011
> IETF LC End Date: Nov-01-2011
> IESG Telechat date: Nov-03-2011
>
> Summary: This draft is ready as a Proposed Standard.
>
> Major issues: 0
> Minor issues: 1
> Nits/editorial comments: 1
>
> Minor issues:
>
> - S3.1: "According to this specification ...", I am not sure what "this"
>  refers to?  Does it refer to draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic or does
>  it, instead, refer to rfc5177 (which is the topic of discussion in the
>  previous paragraph from where the above is quoted)?
>
> Nits:
>
> - S3.2, third paragraph:
>  s/a prefix it MUST/a prefix, it MUST/
>
> Thanks,
>
> - vijay