Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc5405bis

["Black, David" <[e-mail]>]

Paul,

Many thanks for the review.

> (1) Major? - Scope and Audience

> Beyond that it delves into a seeming random assortment of additional
> specialized uses of UDP. These may be of interest to some, but I suspect
> many won't find these things useful. And the topics covered seem to be
> simply what came to mind rather than being in some way exhaustive.

Actually, the selection algorithm is dominated by what's come up in practice and merits advice - Section 3.6 on Limited Applicability and Controlled Environments is an excellent example.

> After diffing this document against RFC5405 I see that it really is an
> incremental change that leaves the scope largely unchanged except for
> the addition of multicast. So perhaps I am too late to question the
> scope of the document. But since this *is* a bis, it might be worth
> considering whether the scope could be focused by splitting some of the
> material off into a different document(s).

<WG chair hat>
Well, I think you're in the "rough" on "rough consensus" here - as this draft is targeted at designers and developers, there is strong WG "rough consensus" to put everything in one place.  To this end, multiple drafts were combined by the WG (e.g., the multicast requirements used to be in a separate draft).

So, (as WG chair for this paragraph only), thank you for your input, but this is a single draft for very good reasons.
</WG chair hat>

> (2) MINOR? - use of SHOULD
> 
> I was struck by how much SHOULD is used in this document, and how
> infrequently MUST is used. And while possible justifications for
> violating SHOULD are sometimes provided, they often are not. In my
> experience there has been a growing awareness that such vagueness is
> problematic, because many implementers take it as free license to treat
> SHOULD as MAY, and just not do it.

I concur - an author scan for use of "SHOULD" would make sense to do a couple of things:

- Make sure the rationale for the strong recommendation is explained.
- Consider upgrading to "MUST".  Otherwise, ensure that potential consequences of not following the "SHOULD" are described.

I prefer describing possible consequences to suggesting justifications for violation, as the latter (IMHO) encourages the (undesirable) behavior of designers and implementers "treat[ing] SHOULD as MAY," and the former is a better match to RFC 2119's definition of "SHOULD."

> (3) NITs

Thanks for noticing these nits - they will all be fixed.

Thanks, --David (as draft shepherd).

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Paul Kyzivat [mailto:[e-mail]]
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> Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc5405bis
> Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
> Review Date: 2016-04-27
> IETF LC End Date: 2016-05-31
> IESG Telechat date:
> 
> Summary:
> 
> This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described in the
> review.
> 
> Issues:
> 
> (Note: I am having difficulty assigning severity levels to these issues.
> So take the leveling with a grain of salt.)
> 
> Major: 1?
> Minor: 1
> Nits:  3
> 
> (1) Major? - Scope and Audience
> 
> I had difficulty understanding the intended scope of this document, and
> the intended audience. It seems to want to be a variety of things.
> 
> * It seems to be a fine reference about congestion control for
> applications of UDP.
> 
> * It also seems to be pretty helpful in challenging developers about
> whether they should be using UDP or something else.
> 
> Probably everyone contemplating using UDP ought to read this for that
> stuff. Those topics would be a good focus for the document.
> 
> Beyond that it delves into a seeming random assortment of additional
> specialized uses of UDP. These may be of interest to some, but I suspect
> many won't find these things useful. And the topics covered seem to be
> simply what came to mind rather than being in some way exhaustive.
> 
> Also, some applicability to congestion control for non-UDP protocols
> (those layered directly on IP) is claimed. This seems a bit of an
> afterthought, and incompletely covered.
> 
> After diffing this document against RFC5405 I see that it really is an
> incremental change that leaves the scope largely unchanged except for
> the addition of multicast. So perhaps I am too late to question the
> scope of the document. But since this *is* a bis, it might be worth
> considering whether the scope could be focused by splitting some of the
> material off into a different document(s).
> 
> (2) MINOR? - use of SHOULD
> 
> I was struck by how much SHOULD is used in this document, and how
> infrequently MUST is used. And while possible justifications for
> violating SHOULD are sometimes provided, they often are not. In my
> experience there has been a growing awareness that such vagueness is
> problematic, because many implementers take it as free license to treat
> SHOULD as MAY, and just not do it.
> 
> (IIUC, in a BCP the normative language is relative to best practice. So
> if MUST is written and you don't do it then you aren't following best
> practice. But if SHOULD is written without qualification, and you don't
> follow it then you can probably claim that you are still following the
> best practice as documented by the document.)
> 
> I note that most of the SHOULD usage is inherited from RFC5405, so there
> is some justification for just leaving it be. But it could be a helpful
> exercise to review all this usage, and consider whether usages of SHOULD
> can be changed to MUST, or if valid justifications for violating the
> SHOULD can be stated.
> 
> (3) NITs: Section 3.1.7
> 
> In the following:
> 
>     The set of mechanisms requires for an application to use ECN over UDP
>     are:
> 
> s/requires/required/
> 
> In the following:
> 
>     [RFC6679] provides guidance an example of this support, by describing
> 
> s/guidance/guidance and/
> 
> In the following:
> 
>     In general, packets may be forwarded across multiple networks the
>     between source and destination.
> 
> s/ the//
> 
> (4) NIT: Appendix A:
> 
> I couldn't parse the following sentence as written:
> 
>     MPLS-in-UDP endpoints must check the source IPv6 address in addition
>     to the destination IPv6 address, plus the strong recommendation
>     against reuse of source IPv6 addresses among MPLS-in-UDP tunnels
>     collectively provide some mitigation for the absence of UDP checksum
>     coverage of the IPv6 header.
> 
> I think it would better reflect the intent if it is changed as follows:
> 
> s/MPLS-in-UDP endpoints must/The requirement for MPLS-in-UDP endpoints to/
> 
> (5) NITs - unlinked references
> 
> I found a number of cases where, in the html format, references are not
> hyperlinked:
> 
> [RFC5405] section 1
> [RFC4342] section 3
> [RFC6679] section 3.1.7
> [RFC1981] section 3.2
> [RFC6935] section 3.4.1
>