Re: [Gen-art] Pre-telechat review of draft-ietf-manet-tlv-naming-02

["Dearlove, Christopher (UK)" <[e-mail]>]

Tom

Thanks for those detailed and useful comments. The soon to be submitted next draft will address all of them.

Christopher

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From: Tom Taylor [mailto:[e-mail]] 
Sent: 10 May 2015 23:37
To: Gen Art; Dearlove, Christopher (UK); T. Clausen; Justin Dean; Alvaro Retana; [e-mail]
Subject: Pre-telechat review of draft-ietf-manet-tlv-naming-02

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This was supposed to be done by May 1, but got buried in my Inbox. My apologies.

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at

<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-manet-tlv-naming-02
Reviewer: Tom Taylor
Review Date:        10 May 2015
IETF LC End Date:    1 May 2015
IESG Telechat date: 14 May 2015

Summary: This document has minor issues that need to be resolved, along with a few nits.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

1. If the requested TLV Type does not immediately define all the corresponding type extensions for versions of that type, the Expert Reviewer or IANA will be faced with the task of choosing an appropriate Type value within which to place the extension. No guidance has been provided for this purpose. What is the intention?

2. No IANA Considerations have been provided for the following registries:
     TC Message-Type-specific Message TLV Types
     TC Message-Type-specific Address Block TLV Types
     HELLO Message-Type-specific Message TLV Types
     HELLO Message-Type-specific Address Block TLV Types
     SMF_TYPE Message TLV Type Extensions
     SMF_NBR_TYPE Address Block TLV Type Extensions



Nits/editorial comments:

Sec. 1, third from last paragraph: s/consisteng/consistent/

Sec. 3.1, s/reguested/requested/ (both outer bullets, first line of each)

IANA Considerations, following Table 11: the current registry name is "ICV[TIMESTAMP] Address TLV Type Extensions" (missing the word "Block"). 
This is inconsistent with the other address block TLV types. I suggest, in place of the current text for these two extension registries, text to resolve the inconsistency, as follows:

OLD

    The IANA Registry "ICV[TIMESTAMP] Address Block TLV Type Extensions"
    is unchanged.

NEW

    The IANA Registry "ICV[TIMESTAMP] Address TLV Type Extensions" is
    unchanged except to add the word "Block" after "Address" in the
    registry name.

IANA Considerations, Table 13 and preceding text: the current registry name is "NBR_ADDR_TYPE ....". This document refers to it as "NBR_ADDR_TYPES ...." (i.e., plural). The inconsistency needs to be resolved.
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