Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04

Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk@MIT.EDU> Thu, 03 December 2015 02:57 UTC

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From: Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk@MIT.EDU>
To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04
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Hi Meral,

Thank you for the review.

On Wed, 2 Dec 2015, Meral Shirazipour wrote:

> Nits/editorial comments:
>
> [Page 3] 2nd and 3rd paragraph: The word "service" is used to designate
> both the proxy-service and the second backend "application-service" as
> per [MS-SFU]. This may confuse the reader at first read.
> Suggestion would be to use "proxy-service" and "application-service".
> [Page 8] after point "2." would also benefit from clearer use of these
> terms.

>From the point of view of the Kerberos protocol, there is only one service
here, so I think it is appropriate to use only a single term.

> [Page 8], last paragraph, it was not clear to me if "service principal"
> is the "application service"?

"service principal name" is the identifier used to represent the
application service within the Kerberos protocol, yes.

I am not sure if I should recommend that the authors make any changes to
reduce the potential for confusion.

-Ben Kaduk