[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-kucherawy-bcp97bis-03

[Vijay Gurbani via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani
Review result: Ready with Issues

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Document: draft-kucherawy-bcp97bis-??
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 2022-09-22
IETF LC End Date: 2022-10-17
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document is "Ready with Issues" to be published as a BCP.

Major issues:

Minor issues:
- S1.1, first paragraph: "...subject matter in the RFC, ..."  Here, does the
"RFC" refer to the document being considered for RFC status?  Or does it refer
to the RFC in the normative reference?  I think it is the former, and if so,
perhaps better to say "... subject matter in the RFC under consideration ..."
(or "document under consideration". or even "RFC-to-be").  You hint to this
dilemma later --- in S3, where you define "source" and "target" documents. 
Another option would be to move S3 before S1 and use the "source" and "target"
terminology defined. - S1.1, top of page 4, first bullet ("If a protocol
relies..."): Perhaps better to say "If a RFC-to-be defines a protocol that
relies ..."? Or "If a target document defines a protocol that relies ...".

Nits/editorial comments:
- S4.1: s/At the option of the author/editor/At the discretion of the
author/editor/ - S4.2: s/added to the "Downref Registry"./added to the "Downref
Registry" (Section 7)./

Thanks,

- vijay