[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-6man-grand-04

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Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-6man-grand-04
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2021-06-17
IETF LC End Date: 2021-06-18
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Ready with Nits

This is a very well written document. I appreciate the section describing the
other Solutions Considered, which is a good guidance and reference for future
discussions and extensions.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

1. In Section 3 the Normative Language with capitalizations is used to describe
requirements from solutions. This seems quite unnecessary, and certainly cannot
be verified for conformance. 2. I would suggest moving or copying the first
sentence in Section 6 (that says that all normative text in the memo can be
found in this section) in the Introduction section.