Re: [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-11

Leeyoung <> Wed, 30 January 2019 01:02 UTC

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Hi Elwyn,

Thanks for further review and confirming the acceptance of the most of the edits while pointing out a few items to be corrected. I will update those during the IESG review. 

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Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-117
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2019-01-28
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-27
IESG Telechat date: 2019-02-07

Ready.  There are a couple of trivial nits remaining. Otherwise, thanks very much for addressing my last call comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
S3: The expansion of 3R needs to be at first occurrence. This is one paragraph earlier than the added expansion in v11.

S3, next to last para: need to expand FEC.

S4.1, para 5: s/to the allocation/used for the allocation/